Please remember that my reviews are just my takes on things, you do not have to take my advice at all if you don't feel it fits the essence of your story. After all, I am only reading a few chapters, other readers might have different takes.

Reverie's Review

Your opening elements are especially strong, even in the foreword I particularly liked the bit where light was made physical in terms of being able to "shred it". But regardless of my personal preferences, your inclusion of the excerpt in Chapter One was powerful. I would recommend keeping this ongoing in your chapters as it does a great job of setting the tone and general vibe of the scene you are coming to create. Try thinking of the overall effect of the book you are creating when working on this aspect if you decide to go forward with it. I find that these little snippets are not only good for tone but also foreshadowing in general.Throughout the chapters, I read you exhibit a strong grasp of aesthetic language and a solid vocabulary that doesn't overreach but is not simplistic either. This is a hard balance to strike yet you've done it! I will stipulate that you utilise the personal "I" a little bit too often, especially in your initial chapters. The use of "I" and the individual sentences that are almost staccato in nature, work extremely well in nightmare scenarios and visions but actually can weaken your writing in the overall narrative sense if continually used to push the plot forward. What I'm trying to get across with this is that your overall flow could be improved upon if you're using varying styles, I would also recommend messing around with formatting a little, mixing up the use of italics for visions/nightmares and the such to keep the flow split in the reader's mind. This would also aid in your use of a disjointed style if you would like to continue on that path. I would also recommend using more setting descriptions for day-to-day objects, nothing major just a little more so we can experience the physical world a little more tangibly outside of the visions.Your world-building is impressive, you have a great sense of the universe you have created and the level of detail is done to a high standard. I especially resonated with your unique terminology of places and items native to your world. For example (Blessed Dew) was integrated well especially with your description of what it was, but I feel like you could refine it further, a sentence that denotes the closest real-world equivalent or fact would be more than enough to be effective.When it comes to the visions and nightmares you could probably go a little more intense with them, shorten the lengths, amp up the frequency and intensity of the scenes and it will help push a little more tension into the plot.Overall you can probably condense the first seven chapters into the three that publishers would read. You need to keep in mind that whoever you're querying if publication is your intent will typically only request the first three chapters of fifty pages. You need to hook them immediately, as such I usually recommend setting the pace and stakes extremely high in that regard, especially in those initial chapters, you need to hook the reader and then allow the story to unfold. I would pick up your plot pacing quite significantly with this in mind, while you are crafting an extremely solid world with a great foundation plot and pacing can be dialled up quite a bit without compromising the integrity of the work as it stands. The advice I usually repeat to myself when working is Kill Your Darlings. In essence, regardless of how much you like something, if it dosent further to plot/narrtive/conflict or something of the like it would be most dvisable to axe it or repurpose it elsewhere in a different manner. You are creating your own world, don't be afraid to carve it up every now and then as you see fit, chances are your readers will be able to follow your train of thought as you do write really well and fluidly.As a whole this is a solid work, you have a good sense of character, the dialogue is smooth and the way your characters speak seems natural for the world they are in. This blended with your unique and consistent terminology of things in regards to your world creates a good disconnection from reality that allows for good immersion. As I've mentioned, your use of language is strong and your flow is smoother than most. I will however restress that you can up the stakes if you so desire and really go to town on your reader's stress levels.