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FIRST IMPRESSIONS!

title! (5/5)

-the title that you chose is perfect for your story! especially when you referenced it in the last chapter huhu

cover! (5/5)

-i like how the cover looks like! it's simple yet pretty? the fact that it relates to the plot of your book makes it very suitable!

description! (10/10)

-ohmygod i love love love how brief yet concise your description is! a short dialogue followed by a heart-wrenching paragraph.

WRITING STYLE!

grammar! (14/20)

-you have a pretty good writing style! for some of the chapters, you chose words that actually hit the readers' hearts and i applaud you for that uwu

-although i did notice some minor grammatical errors while reading and i'll be showing screenshots of them.

-the following photos that you'll see below are from chapters 1-10.

-so um, since i wasn't sure, i searched on the internet if flower names are supposed to be capitalized and most results said no. i may be wrong though, they said that flower names are counted as common nouns which is why i edited 'yellow rose' and made it lowercase.

-i think reading about prepositions will help you a lot so that it'll lessen the possibility of you using the wrong one.

1. '-at the action' sounded fine at first but then in the next paragraph, the same word 'action' is being mentioned and i thought that it kind of sounded off?

-here's how i would rephrase no. 1: '-, softly rotating it between his two fingers, making the petals flutter lightly." you can change it however you'd like though.

-always check if you accidentally doubled the space between two words because if yes, it'll look kind of messy.

-add a comma after adverbs (like yes or no).

-a noticeable mistake here is lack of commas, that's most probably it. i just changed 'the one' because it seemed off to me.

-don't put a comma if it's unnecessary.

1. always remember to put spaces between words and punctuations. '-smile,cry,-' looks so crowded even though it's just two words. '-smile, cry,-' looks so much better, one tap on the space bar changes a lot.

-again with the double spacing and missing commas.

1. the statement that i underlined seems incomplete? like it starts with the verb 'watching', which is actually a gerund. a gerund is a verb ending in -ing that acts as a subject, according to google.

-let's say 'watching' is the subject and a complete sentence requires both a subject and verb. the main subject is 'watching' while a complete subject is basically the whole statement that i underlined. do you notice something missing? yea, well, where's the verb? maybe add an extra phrase of how she's feeling while watching jungkook.

-here's what i would do: 'watching him bring all those heart rendering gifts yet never seeing him face to face broke my heart'. a little reminder, i may be wrong about this.

-other mistakes are misplacement and lack of commas.

-just some comma errors.

-you don't jump between verb tenses a lot which is good but i noticed the first time where you did switch it up.

-it's very noticeable especially if those two verbs are in one sentence. 'saw' is a past verb while 'reminds' is present. since your whole story is written in past tense, just change 'reminds' to 'reminded' to match the rest.

-again, maybe read about prepositions or just proofread your book to help you improve.

-some of the mistakes you made here are the same as before and i've talked about them already. also, they say that 'in front' is more accurate than 'infront' soo-

-just a typo and another inaccurate tense.

-don't capitalize common nouns and be consistent with verb tenses!

-'do you know what else did the florist say?' just sounds really wrong to me which is why i changed it up a bit. 'say' is in present tense while your whole book is written in past tense. if there's already a 'do', you usually don't add 'did' because they're the same verb, just in different tenses.

1. 'i was scared he found me when i heard his voice suddenly' seems off? maybe it's missing some words or something like that, basically. i would rephrase it like: 'i was scared that he found me but then, i suddenly heard his voice'. i'm not really sure how to explain this properly but i hope you somehow understand whoop

-no comment. if you have something to ask me about the screenshot above, go ahead!

-the pronoun 'i' is in subjective case which is used as a subject, hence its name. 'me', on the other hand, is in objective case wherein it can be used as a direct object, indirect object or object of preposition.

-in this case, 'i' is being used as a direct object, which is why 'me' is more appropriate for your sentence.

-more mistakes on double spacing, wrong verb tenses and lack of commas.

-if you start with a verb in a phrase, it'll make that phrase sound like a question.
ex. was it you who ate my pretzel?
but if it's a statement, the subject usually comes first.
ex. it was you who ate my pretzel.

-in your sentence, it isn't and doesn't sound like a question which is why i put the verb after the pronoun.

summary of everything:

-make sure that you place commas where it's needed and remove commas when unnecessary.

-be careful with verb tenses and avoid double spacing as much as possible.

-read about prepositions and try not to confuse them with each other.

-watch out for awkward sentences.

-other than that, i think that your writing style isn't that bad! the most logical solution and tip that i can give you is to once again edit and proofread the entire book. it'll definitely be of great help and will help you improve.

diction! (8/10)

-your choice of words are pretty simple. nothing too over the top but nothing too basic as well. 

editing! (3/5)

-the reason i gave you a three is because of double spacing, as well as typos but that's probably it.

STORY DYNAMICS!

plot! (16/20)

-oooh i quite like your plot! it's unique and one of a kind! especially that 'plot twist' in the end, i didn't expect her to be #### HAHAHA don't wanna spoil future readers oop

-but for some reason, i wasn't fully satisfied aaaah idek why maybe it's because i was craving for more chapters HAHAHA but yeah, that's probably all i have to say.

-applause to you for coming up with your book's plot idea!

flow! (10/10)

-i can't really talk much about the flow as your book's a short story but what i want to say is that although your book is a short story, it still somehow moves smoothly? i don't know, maybe that's just me but i think that each event happened at the right pace.

characters! (8/10)

-i can't really say much about this part either as your book only talked about two characters but i'll say what i wanna say.

-i can see that jungkook's a really loving, considerate and persevering guy while she's also a caring and kind soul. they have slight differences from each other and that's good. i gave you a high score because these two characters have their own emotions and i don't think i'll mistake them as the same person.

OVERALL EXPERIENCE!

satisfaction! (7/10)

-reading your book was quick and was a great pass time but again, ugh idek why, i wasn't fully satisfied. i'm not sure if it's because everything was so fast and that the book ended briskly but i'm somehow feeling that way.

-yes, you wrote a really good book that i'm pretty sure tugged your reader's heart strings but maybe not mine ooop i'm sorry aaaahsja i just wanted to tell the truth asdjsk

addictiveness! (5/5)

-it made me curious about what kind of flower, it's symbolism and a past memory of theirs will be revealed in the next chapter. that's most likely what kept me reading your book! i couldn't stop and was sad when your book ended :<

overall thoughts! (91/110)

-'bed of roses' made me feel refreshed somehow and i had a good time reading it! i really like books with twists like yours so i'm hoping you write more great books like that hehe

-the biggest advice that i can give you is to edit your book and maybe read about prepositions or english punctuations in general to help with your writing.

-thank you so much for requesting! have an amazing day ahead, yana!

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