Author: @s_huddar

Title: I like the title. It's simple, to the point and there's no second guessing about it.

Rating: 5/5

Book Cover: The current cover is good but I suggest to have a more eye-catching cover.

Rating: 4.5/5

Description: The description is well written and precise. I didn't find any mistakes.

Rating: 5/5

Content:-

1) Language & Vocabulary: The first thing I noticed were your words. You have a great choice of words and you know how to use them which is a commendable thing. Some writers know a lot of words but they don't know how to use them in sentences. Your word stock is really good. Keep it up!

2) Style of writing: First of all let me tell you that I love the theme that you have chosen. I just love your writing style. The flow is really good but the thing is sometimes I felt disconnected because some thoughts of the father were repeatative. He was talking about the same thing for a long time.

3) Grammar: Overall the grammar was good but there are still some grammatical errors which you can easily fix by revising your chapters.

4) Punctuation: You need to work on punctuation. In some letters there are too many commas which can confuse the readers sometime. There are some misuse of a semicolon-- the most feared punctuation.

Overall rating: 4.3/5

SOME TIPS AND SUGGESTIONS:-

i) Since your story is about a father writing letters to her orphan daughter, you can put up dates at the beginning of a letter. It will seem more realistic and do italicize them.

ii) The parts wherein her father is talking about a conversation that happened between him and her mother, the ones that are within quotation marks, you can italicize those because since those events have already happened and he is sharing it with his daughter, it will give emphasis to those parts.

iii) I've seen that you use semicolons before words such has 'but' which is not needed. But is used as a conjuction and therefore, a semicolon is not needed in conjunctive phrases.

iv) Also, since you have the Kargil war as a backdrop, you can incorporate some war scenes and how the war is affecting him mentally, emotionally and physically. It will give the letters more depth.

Okay, that's all from me. I really hope I didn't hurt your feelings be cause that was really not my intention and I hope this review helps you in improving the story further. It just needs a touch up, that's all. Don't hesitate to pm me if you need any help. 😊

Keep writing! I wish you all the very best for your future books and good luck with the Wattys. 😊