+...The cover does NOT belong to me...+

This book IS completed. (Just under major editing)

*Spoilers Ahead*

Summary: Jasper is young Eevee who doesn't care much about anything, other than his close friends and his distant solitude away from the hustle and bustle of the Trava region he resides. When comes the day this lazy Eevee is to experience his evolution, something happens that only has occurred once an eon.

Alright, onto the review portion.

I just noticed that as I was reviewing this finally, you had decided to edit your entire story. I apologize for such a delayed review, as I know I could have helped when the whole (or most) of the story was posted online. I will have to base a bit of this review off of what I remember, alongside what is currently established. So, in other words, some things may be unfairly based due to my lack of memory, but I'll try my best.

This will still stay in place if you would like it, but to redeem myself, I'll review your book when it is fully posted--you don't need to put in a request for it. Consider it my apology for any inconveniences I may have caused you. That and to have a better quality review for the whole book.

Grammar wise, this book looks very polished. Considering there is really only one chapter posted in comparison to the dozens that were before), it is a very good start. I realize that this is an updated version, but it looks good.

Sentence structure is good as well. I don't notice any errors around anything. You've done a very good job editing so far. On the editing note, I'm happy to see that you've gone back and edited everything. It is extremely important for authors, let alone anyone, to come back and re-polish their craft.

From what I remember of the story, the character development was really present and worked really well. I wish that there was more character development between the leaders of the clans, but (from what I remember) that was one of the things you wished to address more within the edited version. From memory, I really loved the antagonists of this book. They had a particular spark to them that I really don't remember seeing in other antagonists. I was happy to see the development. 

Though, to be honest, I remember there was more development with the antagonists than there was with Jasper, the main character. Don't get me wrong: character development may happen more frequently with antagonists than protagonists, but I really don't remember much of a character change with Jasper until right when you stopped writing the book. I kind of wished that the development for Jasper would have happened a little sooner, but I was happy to know that it was there.

Plot wise, I thought it was really enjoyable. Based on what you have now, the ending of chapter 1 is a good hook that would bring in your readers, and that's what you want in a book.

Character wise, I was happy to see the details that describe each character, especially the Pokémon with names. Considering I have a bad memory, it really helps to have that additional crutch when addressing characters. Adding in those visual details is extremely important in a story, as it gradually helps us understand the character and what exactly they are/what they are doing.

The development of your characters is good. I'm happy to see that each character you have addressed so far (which is the 5 clan leaders) seem separate from each other, and have their own personality. I don't feel that there are characters (at least not mentioned yet) that don't have that lack of personality or development, which is a wonderful sign.

Overall, I believe that this book of yours was wonderful. Although I wish I would have been able to review the entire book before it was edited (which was my fault 100% for not reading it earlier), I am happy to know that you are putting such care and devotion into your story to correct anything that needed to be changed. Again, my offer stands. Just say the word and I'll do it for you.

Rating:  9/10

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