Just want to make a small note before we begin:
First, I want to thank you guys for being really patient with me. I apologize for not getting your reviews done sooner. I will get to every review I promised and then reopen the review book for a while.

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+...The cover does NOT belong to me...+

This book is completed.

*Spoilers Ahead*

Summary: Tikel the Xatu goes out on a mission that results in the resealing of Dialga, the deity of Time itself.

Alright, onto the review portion!

To start, I noticed that your description was one sentence. Not that it was a bad sentence, but that it was basically a rundown of what the plot was about. The goal of having a description is to pull in your readers. It can be basic or not--I'm not trying to say that it has to be technical. Just having more detail is more important, but it doesn't have to be exactly what the plot suggests. AKA: saying that Tikel takes down Dialga before I even pick up the book defeats the purpose of me wanting to read it. Instead, maybe go towards the idea that Tikel goes out on a journey and somehow ends up involved in a scheme surrounding Dialga.

Speaking on the lines of detail, your story doesn't really have a lot of it. Within different books, some people choose to put in detail and some don't. It is a personal element that you can add to a book that can take more time and effort applying, but it is generally well worth it in the end. Trust me, writing out analysis after analysis can be quite boring and repetitive if you don't fully know what you want to do. But after a lot of time and practice, things like adding detail become second nature.

That's why I fully recommend writing out the story before publishing it. Try out new techniques that you want to try or edit some ones that don't seem to work for you. The nice thing about Wattpad is that the community is mostly full of writers from a huge range of experience. I feel that you are on the right track and, from the wide range of books I've read of yours from the past, I can say that you are improving and adding in some things I've mentioned prior. I just think that your technical skills may need to be a bit polished.

Another major point I wanted to discuss that will be relatively important: when I read this book several years after reading your Prower the Floatzel book, I don't remember the characters. Considering if an audience member--even a current follower--picks up one of your books (that is based off of that series), it helps to add in details to differentiate the characters and make them stand out. I only saw names and, to be frankly honest, I didn't remember anyone or what species of Pokemon they were. For at least the basic introduction (so that the readers can establish who/what the characters are), try to add what type of Pokemon they are or some basic features to differentiate them from others. By doing so will add some more detail to your story and make your characters stand out more independently.

Your chapter length is a bit short, but I believe we've touched up on this before. What I may or may not have mentioned was that with lack of length comes great importance to detail. If you have a story that lacks the quantity (page number, chapters, paragraphs, etc.), it becomes critical for the quality to be boosted for interest and appeal. Unfortunately I didn't feel very appealed to continue reading. In fact, in many places I felt lost as to the direction of the story.

Fluidity was a little bit messy. Your stories seem more organized than before (which is great), but I still can see that it is a little choppy when reading it. My recommendation is to apply some of the skills I've tried to mention to you a little bit more. Try to take your time writing it. Get as much detail and description as you can and go from there. Your first draft might not look as good, but that isn't much of an issue down the line. After all, sentences can be erased and replaced rather quickly when typed.

Rating: 4.5/10

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/89605218-the-adamant-change

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