+...The cover does NOT belong to me...+

A note to MaggieAllan3: I am SO sorry that it took this long to write this review. I haven't had a lot of time lately, but I managed to squeeze in some time tonight to write this. Again, I am SO sorry. Thank you for being so patient with me. I really appreciate it.

This book is currently NOT completed.

*Spoilers Ahead*

Summary: An Eevee named Charlotte lives in her home until one fateful day. The day she is captured in a capsule called a PokeBall (Great Ball to be exact) and is now owned by a boy named Jacob. She is now acquainted with Jacob's two other Pokemon: A kind and sweet Turtwig and a Purrloin, who wants nothing to do with humans.

Alright. Onto the review portion.

Because of the very short length of this story (and the incompleteness of the story), I may not be able to give you a complete review. This will be reviewed to the best of my ability.

So, first thing that I noticed with this story was you pointed out the perspectives during the chapter. AKA: 1st, 2nd, 3rd person. It was interesting, to say the least, but I felt that it could have been updated a bit more. It left me confused when you mentioned that the perspective was unknown/unown throughout the chapter, even though it was clearly 1st person. It is then specified that most of the chapters had the narration of Charlotte, most likely the main protagonist in this story.

Speaking on the lines of Charlotte, I had something I wanted to address... When Charlotte was mentioned in the story, it was never specified until a few chapters later that she was an Eevee, let alone a Pokemon at all. It was greatly assumed, as she seemed to not like humans. Then again, you can be a human and not like humans. The same thing can go with Pokemon. However, when she encounters a human (Jacob to be exact) she practically suction cups herself to him as if nothing was wrong. Honestly, I blinked a few times in amazement... I really thought for a moment that she didn't like humans. Well, until the major cliff hanger you put in at the end of either Chapter 4 or 5 where she randomly wakes up and is stabbed with a needle by this random person in a lab coat with a mask on. That's when you finally could see that she didn't like humans...

Throughout the story, I had noticed that in your writing you don't space out enough. Especially with the conversations between characters. The way it is written now is confusing and it makes it hard to read. I personally felt that I was scanning through the paragraphs without getting the details that I wanted to know. It also didn't help much when the writing skips around so that one point you're sitting and then next you're hiking Mt. Everest. It doesn't make sense.

When I'm talking about a Pokemon review, I shouldn't add in Mt. Everest... That makes sense, right? Well, that would make sense, but it seems that you had added in an extremely small thing in the first chapter that would cross modern society and Pokemon. That would be "Termites" and "Bug Poison"...

At the mention of that topic, my eyes widened slightly. I mean--after all, they are Pokemon.... Using "Bug Poison" on bug Pokemon and on "Termites", which don't even exist in the Pokemon world. Well, not that is documented in the PokeDex, at least. (Unless if Durant is classified as a "Termite")

A point that I found interesting was where a reader could add in their own character into your story. It makes it that readers have more of a connection towards your characters, as well as their own characters that were put into the story. It also gives the readers something more to enjoy, knowing that their character is part of the struggle along with the main characters.

To end things off, I wanted to ask a quick question.

I wasn't sure if you entirely planned this, but did you plan for the main region of this story to be solely based around Kalos? Either way, it's fine, but I had noticed it when I was reading. I especially noticed it when it had mentioned during one of the later chapters that Jacob and his team of Pokemon were at Aquacorde Town. 

Rating: 5.5/10

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