Rosalin01 wanted another re-review. This time it is for their story "William and Neliel: Sibling Rivalry". I believe that they did work on editing this story, however, I don't know how much they've gotten.

Since this is a re-review, I don't need to add a summary.

Alright, so let's get to the review portion!

It seems that I always have to start with grammar, especially with your stories, Rosalin01... I really don't know why, though. To be completely honest, I only needed to skim in order to find issues and problems in this story. The only solution I can supply you with is you should look through the information you typed for the story and proof read it as many times as you need. Not just one time. It will help you see your own errors in the story and it can teach you ways with correcting your stories.

When peaking around at different points, I noticed that you, quite often, put references to your other stories inside of this one. It's neat that you did that, but at the same time it adds a repetitive effect to the story that can turn people off. When you use one a little bit for a few sentences is fine. When you try to impy a reference every other chapter, it gets old very quickly.

I really like the concept of this story, but you need to spend more time looking over your work(s) then worrying about a due date. When you gain more experience with writing, then (and only then) can you set up due dates for yourself. When you feel you are ready to write a chapter, take the time and effort to make sure that it is the best work you can write at the time.

Everything takes time. You just need to find that time and put good use to it.