+...The cover does NOT belong to me...+

This book is NOT completed.

*Spoilers Ahead*

Summary: This is a story about 5 trainers travelling around the region of Hercu together as detectives. All are in search of answers and this random 6th trainer.

Alright, onto the review portion.

First, I would like to mention about the grammar. I noticed that there are some areas that spelling is an issue, especially with the Pokémon species themselves. There are some instances that where characters have intentional ways of speaking, it isn't fully followed the entire time for its usage. AKA: The sailor captain in Chapter 1 often uses me instead of my, but it isn't always followed and (to replicate an accent) it isn't fully correct. I could tell what you were trying to say, but going fully into the details, it was a bit noticeable.

Sentence structure is a bit chunky. It is more noticeable when you could add more commas in-between words and sentences. Or, just in general, fixing some of the sentences to make them more fluid.

From a standard view, the basics of fluidity are okay and comprehendible, but I feel that you are trying to overcomplicate it by adding more characters. When you jump from POV to POV, it makes the fluidity incoherent and pointless. There is a good amount of potential here, but I feel that having first person POV the entire time and flipping it between multiple characters isn't working for you and this story. When you have a multitude of characters, it's best to try putting your story in third person instead. It will make it easier, so you don't have to introduce and conclude a person per few paragraphs.

Also, a beneficial way to assist you in that matter as well is to break down your chapters and make them smaller to incorporate more information for more characters. Either that or incorporate dividers that don't say, for example, "Reef's POV".  I mean literal dividers. Have it completely separated and not something that will confuse the reader. It is fine to gain knowledge or talk about one or more people per chapter -- just don't go overboard with changing it. I think that, with the obvious incorporation of more detail, directly stating whose POV it is won't matter because the detail will tell you right away who it is. There should be enough detail there that, after a bit, the readers should already infer who the person/Pokémon you are talking about is.

There are a lot of characters you first introduced. To be fair, I feel that some characters are starting to gain some good character development. I just think that some are not and feel very extra. The few characters that feel very extra kind of feel like filler-characters. They are literally there to appeal to the audience. When you mention about things happening to these characters, I just didn't really feel anything for them. It would have been better to break down more character development for less characters at a more gradual pace. If you introduce more than a handful of characters at a time, make sure to have each one more individualized.

I just want to point it out (not sure if you were intending this), but it seems like the characters that you were introducing within the few chapters you have established so far are very cut and dry. They feel very similar to each other (with the exception of their Pokémon being different). 

May I mention something else: the Pokémon have nicknames and it is kind of confusing differentiating them from each other. I understand that each one is different from the other, but maybe ask that you add some more detail to incorporate the differences between them and the others. The same goes for the human trainers/professors/etc. in the story. The goal of having description and needed detail is so that it can alleviate confusion to the best of its ability. And, to some degree, that is a common problem with writing books--that lack of visual aid. When you don't have visuals to help you (like most books lack), it makes understanding a character a bit more difficult. Under normal situations, that confusion can be removed when adding more detail about the scenario and how it affects other characters/Pokémon throughout the story.

With this, I feel that you are on the right track with your story. I just think you need to read through it a few more times and incorporate some of the changes I recommended. Please don't get me wrong, I feel that this story will do well and has some potential to do well for itself. I just think it needs a bit more work before it gets to that point.

Rating:  5.5/10

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