+...The cover does NOT belong to me...+
Though in this case I did make it, but the images used within the cover are NOT mine.

This book is completed.

*Spoilers Ahead*

Summary: Red, a young mute boy, begins his journey as a Pokemon Trainer.  Determined to find out why he doesn't have a voice (and how to fix it), he journeys around with his Pokemon in a grand adventure around Kanto.

Alright, onto the review portion!

I have to say that I'm happy that you used my cover. I hope that the recent one is still one you like using. (This isn't part of the review, but I just wanted to make mention of it.)

Anyways,  grammar and spelling isn't terrible. Not that I was expecting it to be terrible, but it was a nice thing to see. Of course, there were some issues, but it looks a lot better than the other book I've reviewed of yours. 

I can also tell that you've taken more time and effort into putting detail into your book. It helps that there is details, but it seems that most of the detail mentioned is based around clothing articles and hair/eye colors. Don't get me wrong: all of that is very important when lack of visuals is there--and that's one of the sacrifices that you have when writing a book. However, try describing even the smallest things in a bit more detail. (AKA: there is a difference between "Magikarp splashed in a puddle" vs "The Magikarp helplessly flailed in the dried up reservoir. Its orange scales drying and cracking under the blistering sun.") Now, this doesn't fully apply to all of your chapters (some are more detailed than others), but it would be best to check over them and edit where you feel it is appropriate. It takes some time to rewrite descriptions with details. Though it helps if you don't have a stack of full description and then go to nothing. You are able to describe features and clothing while talking about a person. It doesn't always have to be grouped together before a person first speaks. Then again, it depends on the circumstance.

On another note, I really love how you adapted your concept for having a mute character still interacting with their Pokemon. In a way, it demonstrated that, even with the complication in Red's life (in particular his muteness), he was able to establish a relationship with his Pokemon without a word being technically expressed. It was very interesting to see, considering most stories I've read revolve in the main character talking to some degree. I appreciate the different approach and the intended originality--it's very nice to see.

Overall with Red as a character, by the end of the book, I really enjoyed him. Unfortunately, it took me a while (personally) to be able to connect with this character. Maybe if you could establish a hook or a connection to your audience in helping them understand Red, it will also help establish a better development of Red's character. I can tell that Red has life as a character, which is a plus in my book--as he's not the standard 'John Doe'-esk character, but I wish that he could have shown that a little earlier. Not a full life story, don't get me wrong. Just a characteristic that can appeal and hook a reader in and will guarantee that they will stay for at least a few chapters. It will help fuel in interest if intended readers have a hook of interest in a character/set of characters.

Chapter length is good, so I won't really comment at all about that.

On a different chapter note, try and make sure that different topics within different chapters are separated. Otherwise, it becomes confusing and can make the fluidity slightly choppy. The structure gets better 

Rating: 6.5/10

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