+...The cover does NOT belong to me...+

This book is NOT completed.

*Spoilers Ahead*

Summary:  This is an original story based around the main character (Tatsumi's) struggle to survive in the apocalypse.  Within 3 waves, almost all of the humans were eradicated from the face of the planet, and no one really knew why until it was too late.

Alright, onto the review portion.

When you requested this review, there were a lot more chapters in this book. I realize that you have gone through and edited your story to accommodate a 3rd person POV for this story. That decision you made I feel is going to be the most beneficial for your story. Stories feel smoother and have a more fluid appearance (generally--sometimes there are exceptions) under a 3rd person POV. It establishes your characters more and I believe that you are off to a great track so far!

Grammar wise, everything looks pretty good. There are the occasional spelling errors or grammatical structure errors, but for the most part, everything is pretty solid. A basic run-through for the spelling and grammar issues that are present would be the best way to fix those errors. Don't get me wrong, there aren't a lot. Just make sure to keep an eye out for it.

Sentence structure is pretty good as well. I would keep an eye out for some sentences, which felt slightly run-on in nature. There are only a few sporadically, but reading through it again and breaking down those sentences would help greatly. Overall, there isn't a lot to complain about at all, which is great!

I feel that you established your characters very well. I felt that each one had their own development and they feel to be their own. I have to say, those Shinigami / four-armed creatures are VERY well detailed. I was very engaged and could envision the characters dealing with those monsters. I could grasp the feeling of being in an apocalypse. 

The plot itself has been established rather well so far! It is very entertaining and it isn't hard to keep engaged. I found it hard to stop reading to write the review as I was reading it. I feel there is a lot of potential for this story to become coming great! Just don't give up on your story. I understand that it might be difficult writing a story you feel isn't going anywhere, but trust me. 

In response to your author's note you posted within the Introduction, I feel that you shouldn't delete your story. I understand and respect your decision either way, but I feel that the care and effort you put into this project, it would be a shame to see that potential leave. Either way, like I mentioned before, I understand and respect your decision that this is your story. So, either way, you should have the final say as to whether you terminate this project or not.

Rating: 8/10

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/123532182-desolation-editing
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