+...The cover does NOT belong to me...+

Quick note to SSGSSJ2: I am SO sorry that it took this long to work on this review...! For the past few months, I have been really busy and haven't found the time to sit down to read a book. It also didn't help that I had lost a very close family member about a month ago... Fortunately, I had found time to do this today. Again, I am SO sorry for it being this late. Thank you SO SO much for being so patient with me, especially during this time.
If there is something that you want me to do for you, to make up for the extended delay, please let me know.

SSGSSJ2 wanted to inform that this book "takes place in a Pokemon world where humans are next to non-existent, and Pokemon now live like humans."

This book is completed.

*Spoilers Ahead*

Summary: Kilian, a shiny Bagon, experiences life's challenges as he learns about a futuristic event that could change everything. He, along with his friends, must trust fate as it guides them towards their ultimate goal to stop Gary, a power-obsessed Gengar that plans on taking over all of Hoenn.

Alright, here's the review portion.

I really loved how original this story is. You had created a book that had quite a bit of relation to the readers. Well, at least with most of the plot line. With bullies, school drama, school itself, and growing up. I felt I could connect with earlier parts of the plot line. Even with the other part, the war, the plot line was still original.

Though the plot line was unique, I felt that the characters may need some help. First things first... Kilian himself.

In my opinion, I believe that Kilian is kind of like a "Mary-Sue", if you know what I mean. If you don't, I'll explain it to you. Kilian is a one of a kind character (he's shiny) and he has almost perfect IVs and EVs. That, right there, is kind of a Mary-Sue character. His stats make him almost unbeatable... As long as he has the right move pool--Wait! He does have a good move pool...
He has the ability to use Aura to heal Pokemon... I looked up details about Aura. It had said that only certain Pokemon can have the ability to use and control Aura. (Aura can't be used to heal. Aura can; however, be transferred to another being, but it doesn't heal them.) That along with the other things Kilian, conveniently, has, it can deem him as a Mary-Sue. Fortunately, I do feel as though he is his own character in the story. Compared to the other characters in this book.

The other characters in this book, other than Gary, I felt all mushed together. They had no individuality, in order to make themselves different. Often, I am really sad to say this, I would mix up which character was which. I had to re-read chapters a few times over in order to realize who was who. Even now, I still don't remember who was who.

One part that I noticed, specifically around how you had written this story, is you don't space out enough of the text. Because you don't space out enough, it may cause characters to seem jumbled. The uneven spacing and jumbling of paragraphs is most likely the reason that the characters seem as clustered as they are now.

This might not seem like a problem, but it looked as though you had put in some time skips. There is nothing wrong with time skips; it's how you use them. Often, whenever you put in time skips, it would jump a considerable amount of time. Half the time, it usually was hard for me to find out how long each time skips was, until some character would mention it.

Another small problem that I had noticed is that there were a lot of shiny Pokemon in this story. If Kilian was to be original, then why are at least 1/3 of the characters in this story shiny? I'm not trying to offend you with this, but I would like to know why you decided this...

Throughout the story, you had the characters go through their past hardships in flashbacks. Though this usually works to help out with your characters, I felt as though some of the characters you had used this for made them worse of a character. For instance, Seth. I felt as though he was a very mysterious character to begin with. My thoughts about Seth immediately changed when I heard his backstory. I didn't Seth like I did before. If you would have gradually introduced his past, it would have been better. The same goes for the other characters and their pasts.

To end this off on a few happy notes, I would like to talk about Kilian's father. At the very end of the story, he had sent Kilian a letter, in which he received during his graduation. I felt as though it was good idea; bringing in the idea that his father was there for him, even though he was mostly out of Kilian's life.

And last but not least, Elisa. I liked this concept, even though it kind of confused me at first... All of a sudden, Keeton and Haylee have a niece. Elisa, the daughter of Gary (the once Emperor of Hoenn) and Raven...? How did this happen...? Was it by force--want? What I'm trying to say is that I didn't expect this to happen. It's good, don't get me wrong! I just didn't think that would happen...

Overall, you did a really good job with this book. Hopefully you can keep these thoughts in mind if you ever decide to make a book like this in the future.

Rating: 6.5/10

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