Good morning/afternoon, author. Lovely day for a review.

Now let's get started.

I'd like to start off by mentioning I do horribly when it comes to reviewing short stories. It's not that I find them bad, I just have an extremely difficult time properly building up a complete opinion of them sometimes. I still don't know if I enjoyed your book or not. I was very neutral during the read and it was hard for me to get in tune with it. Your writing is simple.

In short though, i think the story in whole was okay. Simply okay.

In my eyes though, I do believe that Chester maybe made this whole ordeal up within his head in order to finally let go of the loss of Celine. And by truly letting go of the restriction he kept on himself he was finally able to see what he had been missing since her death and the accident. If this isn't the case, and your story is written exactly as is, that's still fine. Regardless, I understand.

There's a bit of grammar mistakes. Like words used improperly and sentences worded wrong. Examples and ways to change some would be:

'That's her last words.' to Those were her last words.

'A tear shed her eyes and as soon as she told me, "I love you." ' to Tears shed from her eyes as soon as she told me, "I love you."

Quick rewording and recognizing the use of wrongly used words would help your story.

Honestly I feel a bit bad writing this review. The writing, for me, made me feel as though I were reading/watching a play. I wouldn't say it's boring, I just wholeheartedly could not get in tune with it.

Your rating:

Storyflow/plot: This was a bit hard to decide honestly, especially since it's a short story. I'd give it a 3 though.

Grammar: 3

Dialogue: 3

Creativity: 4

Overall rating: 13/20

Again, it wasn't that your story was boring or anything, it was just very...simple. And yes, simple can be really good when it comes to some writing, but with this, it just kind of felt bland. When I say I couldn't get in tune with your writing/story, it means there was no wow, no excitement, no questioning, and no feelings during my read. Simply neutral reading. I think you should work more on descriptions and character actions/expressions, I believe this would help too.

If I offend you in any way because of this review, don't be afraid to let me know.

I thank you for giving me the opportunity to review your story, and I hope to read more from you in the future. Thank you.

@ValerieEveDiestro