Good morning, author! Happy Saturday!

Now, let's get started.

I'd like to begin by admitting that I've NEVER read a story like this before; and even though it wasn't really my cup of tea, it was a very interesting concept/ new experience for me.

It's a unique story, I'll give you that, and your writing, to me, gave off that kind of animalistic pov vibe. The shortened sentences really helped this a bunch honestly.

If I'm being honest, and in no way am I trying to come off rude, I felt as though I were reading a children's book. The characters, the dialogue, the facts, etc. I don't know if this was your intention, but either way, I enjoyed that aspect of it. It was simple, in a way, and provided facts of dinosaurs and a form of insight of the tragedy they had to suffer.

I think my only concern with your book would be your final chapter. I completely understand your want for the reveal/shock of Messummer, but to me, I believe you executed it a bit poorly. There was little to none hints of this occurring throughout the book, and even though at times that's a great thing, it just seemed like you dropped this ball out of no where. And by ball I mean Dan's mom's spirit being one with Messummer's (if I worded that incorrectly, I apologize).

It was a bit confusing, to say the least. You wrote it as though Messummer was no more and it was now strictly in Becca's pov, so it wasn't confusing as far as the plot goes, I understand what was happening, just the whole sudden pov switch. I'd say let the pov go back to being strictly Messummer's once Becca re enters her body.

But other than that I don't see anything else worthy of pointing out. It was short, sweet and simple.

Your rating:

Story flow/plot: I'll give this a 4. Not because it's a short story/spin off but the reason being only because of the last chapter.

Grammar: 5

Dialogue: 5. It fit well with the story/characters so I found no problem with it.

Creativity: 5. A truly unique story.

Overall rating: 19/20

I do enjoy the lesson of having to move on eventually from things that could potentially hold us back. To go forward in life but never forget, and I really do believe this short story could help kids in need or just people in general stuck in a continuous pit of sadness over the death of a loved one. Again, very good job author.

I thank you for giving me the opportunity to review your story, and I hope to read more from you in the future. Thank you.

(Also, I'd like to apologize for the long wait, and if this review is not up to your liking, I apologize for that as well. I have been very busy sadly and it'll probably be a week until I'm back on a steady and stable schedule. Thank you for your patience.)

@CroodsGirl