A/N: This book has currently only one chapter, so I can't really talk about plot and character development. I'll be modifying the format accordingly.

Username: BroodingCynic

Title: Sanguinis

Genre: Supernatural Thriller.

Focus: Everything

No. Of chapters reviewed: 1

THE COVER: 4.5/5

The cover is really good. It suits the story perfectly. The image is well chosen. There is good spatial awareness. The colours, esthetics and mood are perfect. On the flip side the title is a little blurry. The font is perfect both for the author's name as well as the title but it could be a little clearer. You have to look closely to make out the author's name and there's something underneath the author's name that I can't really make out.

But overall, this is very well made cover.

THE BLURB: 4.5/5

It has the right amount of intrigue, mystery and it piques interest. The format is good. It gives a clear picture of what the story is going to be about. It could be a bit longer, but if I'd come across the blurb by accident, I'd wanna know more.

THE PREMISE: 5/5

Since I can't really talk about the plot as whole, I'm gonna talk about the premise. The idea is to truly innovative. It takes the well established notion of selling your soul to a demon for something and flips it by making the demon a friend. If executed well, this truly could end up being amazing and unique.

THE WRITING: 4/5

The writing is fine. There are no grammatical mistakes as such. Punctuations are proper. There's a bit of odd phrasing here and there. Usually the writing is solid but sentences like "I opened my pocket watch and smiled at the picture of my mother and I" & "they would still be accountable for leading me to failure" sound odd. There's nothing wrong with them grammatically, but it's confusing. Who still owns a pocket watch? And even if they did why would they have a picture inside? It's so small and there would be no place. It's a throw away sentence, but the moment I read it, it confused me and it distracted me from the story. I wouldn't have cared so much if it wasn't the opening lines of the story. But since it is, the opening lines really need to be strong and pull the readers in. As for the second sentence, which college kid talks like that? It sounds so stiff and formal.

The next thing is I don't know why you have chosen to make the dialogues of the demon bold. Maybe to show his deep voice or something? But the format makes it hard and it interrupts the flow of the narrative. I highly recommend you don't bold it because honestly, the demon's dialogues were the best part of the whole thing.

IS IT A HOOK? 4.5/5

As a first chapter, this really works well. I loved sanguinus. He is sassy and sarcastic. A well thought out portrayal. It gave enough back ground. The back story initially seemed too rushed to me because his mother's illness wasn't dealt with any real emotion. But as I read on I realized, it wasn't meant to be. It wouldn't have suited the tone of the the book. I liked the whole thing. The bold areas were the only real problem I found, cause they broke the flow. But otherwise it intirigued me and I'd want to know more. Good job!

OVERALL SCORE: 22.5/25