Title:
Arranged Marriage

Author:
Fehi_Muan5

Review:

Cover could be more better but it was good. I hope you get another background because the picture used was very common. You can request it from any graphic shops!
Title is pretty common too. I liked the title but you can make it more special and related like "When prides are under one roof" etc. It is long but it suits your story perfectly or you can also keep the title as "two proud peacocks".
Descriptions was good...you can say best. I liked your description so much. It was amazing. Keep up the good work!

First chapter wasn't bad but I liked first chapter. It was full of suspense and questions that if Myler and Ellen knew each other or if they knew then what was her problems and etc...XD. I liked your first chapter a lot!!

Character development was awesome. At last both leads proud got broken and they had accepted their fate which was the best for me.

Plot wasn't much good. It's because you haven't described their bondings well. The suffering were wonderful done but the bondings must be described too. Everything seemed too fast and it was cringe for me. I know you can do more better!

Grammar was good but you can improve more in sentences. Use different words to describe same feelings! I mean... you need to improve your vocabulary!

Rating: 3 out of 5.5

PS
Everything I said was my opinion if I have said anything wrong then please forgive me!
And all the best of your future!❤️