Story Title: My Vaccum

Story Author: KyleBilkeyYT

Reviewer: Desirae, Lazy_Headphone_Girl

OK, first of all, the bad stuff:

-The story parts are far too short

-The writing..."btw" isn't something you put into stories...

-The description should be talking about the story

-The grammar isn't very good

-You need to add SPEECH MARKS! {Or inverted commas if you're a grammar freak like Azure}

-They're all far too out of character, and oddly dirty, even for 18  and 19 year olds.

-If there is going to be swearing in the story, for goodness' sake PUT A WARNING! If there are going to be lemons PUT A MATURE RATING! My younger sister Azure (just about the cutest cinnamon roll ever) NEARLY read it!

-I'm pretty sure that since Ash and Dawn travelled all over Sinnoh together, they would have a more EMOTIONAL reunion. Not a mouthful of swears. Like, a high five, or something!

-Why all those emojis?

Good stuff:

-I like the idea of Calem being in it

-I haven't seen many fanfics with Ash and Dawn and the others being older, so good idea...

Conclusion:

To be honest with you, the story is pretty crappy. I hope you aren't offended, but really, I don't think it's clean cut or grammatically correct enough. Sorry...

RATINGS-

Plot: 4/10

Character/Personality: 2/10

Grammar: 0/10

Overall: 3/10

{Remember, these are purely opinions}