Congratulations to the winners!

There will be three placement winners and one honorable mentions, so four overall winners. I apologize that there are not two, but there have been too many backouts, and a lot of categories are having limits on their honorable mentions.

If you have any questions or concerns, please let me know, though I am not tolerating disrespect or hate.

Please read your review all the way through before asking questions since I sometimes take a while to explain, so your question may be answered by the time I finish up the review.

Next: I am working on best duo and best characters. 

There has been an issue with the best trope category. Yes it will absolutely be judged, there's just been some issues I need to handle. I am working on it, though, and I will keep you updated.

Now that the contest is almost complete, I am no longer allowing backouts.

Only three categories left!

3rd Place

Thin Air by jahools

Review:

There are quite a few things I like about the chemistry in this story, both from a main lead romance perspective and from the overall chemistry throughout the book perspective. I liked Hana and Yoongi together quite a bit, especially later in the story. At the start, I thought they were okay, but I really began to enjoy them during chapter 7 when they had their conversation at the bar. That was one of the best scenes in the entire book for me, and I thought that you did a good job presenting their dialogue and making them bounce off each other really well.

Another thing I liked was... well, Jimin. I know, I know. Booo throw tomatoes at me for never failing to bring up Jimin. Alright, alright, laugh it up... but I'm being serious. Jimin only appeared a few times, but he was so cute and charming. And there's actually a better reason I'm bringing him up: you manage to make the BTS members feel different and unique despite them having little screentime. Jimin is colorful and blunt, Namjoon is supportive and always there for Yoongi, Jin is Jin, etc. They don't have much screentime since it focuses on Yoongi and Hana, but when the BTS boys are there, they fit in super well and don't feel forced in any way. They feel like natural additions that add to the overall chemistry between characters.

While on the topic, that leads me to the overarching point about that: the chemistry between everyone feels realistic and engaging. Namjoon and Yoongi are the standouts in terms of the friendship chemistry. Namjoon and Yoongi have great chemistry where they are super supportive of one another and really there for each other whenever needed, which is always nice to see, and I think you did a good job making them feel like real friends.

I only have two critiques, and one is more of a nitpick. I'll start with that since it's the small thing: there were a lot of nods, sighs, shrugs, and head shakes throughout the story. It's not a big deal, but it did get repetitive at times. It's one thing if just one character does them since they have a habit of doing one of those things, but every character contributed to the nods, sighs, shrugs, and head shakes, not just one. So consider diversifying those four verbs a bit, if that makes sense.

The second thing is something I believe I may have mentioned in a past review (I've done so many reviews that I sometimes forget ;-;), but there were times when two characters were speaking (like Hana and Yoongi), and almost every line would have dialogue tags, so consider downsizing on them since they can become distracting and take some emotion away from the lines being spoken. Sometimes two tags are used for the same person, like "Well," Hana said after Yoongi had ordered. "We'll see you around out here," she said, pointing to the dance floor. "Yeah?" (chap 4). And you do this frequently. It gets better later in the story, and it's also not as big a deal when you have 3 or more people speaking (since that warrants more tag usage), though consider downsizing when only two people are speaking since there were times it felt like every line had a tag. I hope that makes sense.

Overall, Thin Air lives up to its name: Hana pops out of thin air all the time and gives Yoongi an emotional conflict between just getting out of a messy relationship and having a girl who's genuinely good for him right there and waiting. It provides a fun narrative that has deeper emotions present that the reader will appreciate, and I think this was all in all a good time!

2nd Place

Body and Soul by 4everSherlocked

Review:

I've reviewed this story a few times in the past, and much of what I said before remains the same here, though this time, I'm looking more specifically at Jungkook and Laylin, two characters I always enjoyed, which leads me to my first point: Jungkook is like a puppy in love, dawg. He gives her puppy eyes wherever she goes, and that's something I appreciate a lot. The way he goes miles for her (literally) in the name of how much he cares for her is adorable, and I think that adds a lot to the chemistry in the book.

Another thing I liked was Jungkook himself and how he was a fun character with a lot of charm that made him likeable wherever he was. Whoever he was interacting with had great chemistry with him. Laylin was the same way, which means both of your leads had well-rounded chemistry both with each other and with those around them.

The last thing I'll mention before moving into critiques is the overall chemistry between everyone. All the BTS members are so well-placed here and make sense for what you're trying to do. They all bounce off each other really well, both before and after the body switch, and there are many fun scenarios created as a result of the body switch that makes the chemistry feel even more fun to read about, which is great as that means your chemistry between all your characters was solid!

As for critiques, they all remain the same as I've had in the past, like the occasional grammar errors with dialogue and semicolons/commas that can make awkward pauses and sentences here and there, and also the occasional expository dialogue that felt a little unnatural when compared to the otherwise very natural chemistry between the leads. However, those are smaller things and also things I've mentioned before, so I won't dwell on them, especially when the rest of the chemistry is good!

Overall, Body And Soul is a cute narrative that features a nice romance between the two main leads, Jungkook and Laylin. The storyline about idolizing people has moments where it's light and fun, and moments where it's deep as heck, so I think that made for a nice balance people will enjoy. All in all, you did good with the chemistry in this book!

1st Place

Phantasmagoria by Seamlesslove

Review:

I fear you ate.

Well, where do I start? Since I have a feeling a lot of people are going to read this review, I'll give a little backstory. An, or Seamlesslove, is a very close friend of mine, and I've read much of her work. This, however, is unlike anything I've read by her. It's experimental, it's unique, it plays around with your expectations, etc. So before I get into the chemistry of Jungkook and Yasmine, I just want to appreciate that the format is super unique and caught my eye almost immediately. I loved how it was formatted, and I thought that made it really experimental and appealing. I also like how both Y/n and Jungkook's POVs are like poems. Considering the poetic nature of the narrative, it makes sense. Normally I'm not a big fan of that many snappy lines back-to-back, but I thought it worked well here.

So I just wanted to appreciate those things even though they don't have to do with the chemistry. But moving into the chemistry itself, I liked Yasmine and Jungkook's dynamic. I really don't want to get into heavy spoilers since I want to encourage people to read this on their own, but the point is, there's a lot more to the story than just Yasmine and Jungkook. Their relationship is actually one of the things that this story prioritizes least in a thematic sense. It's more about someone else, and also art as a whole, which is a very good thing. So the chemistry is interesting to judge here since the chemistry is more between another character, Y/n, and the theme rather than Jungkook's romantic relationship with Yasmine.

That's why it's interesting to judge this: the chemistry is more with Y/n and herself than anyone else, and I think that makes for a super unique reading experience with more layers unfolded the more you read. You're rewarded for reading closely and for continuing to read. That and the short chapters make for a snappy, poetic experience that readers will be confused about—in a good way. They'll be curious confused, not confused confused, if that makes sense.

Y/n's relationship with herself was very interesting and fun to read about, and Jungkook and Yasmine also were interesting to read. There were many cool lines in Jungkook's POV that I found entertaining, so I think you overall did a good job with this.

I only have two minor critiques, and one of them isn't really a critique, more a general statement, but not a big deal since it doesn't detract from the story at all. The first is something I won't dwell on since your recent works don't do this anymore, but it's the overuse of dialogue tags to the point where sometimes almost every line if not every one has a tag, and since every conversation is only between two people, it did get a bit distracting and repetitive at times, but again, it's not something I'm going to focus on since it's not a huge deal, though tags can get distracting and drain some of the emotion from certain moments, so that's why I'm still mentioning it.

Like I said, this next "critique" is more of a general statement than a critique, but I wasn't sure about the choice to make this a Y/n character instead of an original character, simply because she had so much pre-determined personality and even a pre-determined look. However, it didn't really take away from the emotional impact, so it's no big deal (after all, Y/n is just a character name, really), though it is still something worth mentioning since I like to give all my thoughts while reading.

Overall, you ate this up. It's a unique story that immediately had me saying Oh, that's interesting the second I saw the formatting of it, and the poetic nature mixed with the snappy, short chapters gives readers a reading experience unlike what they've seen before. I only had minor critiques that didn't take away from the overall experience. The chemistry was chemistrying, so good job, this was a fun read with a lot of creativity in it, and I'm very glad I didn't look up the word prior to reading since that added to the experience.

Honorable Mention

Hard to love, Hard to lose by dwarkaratna

Review:

The first thing I really liked about this was how dedicated to Subhanwita Arjun was. I thought it was really cute that even though the pressures from family and society weighed down on him, he still held on to her and wanted to stay with her regardless, even as the secret relationship pressed down more and more on his chest. Like in chapter 2 when Arjun quickly corrected himself to say his home was hers too since they're married, I thought that was a cute moment where Arjun was like a puppy dog in love, and I always appreciate moments like that.

Another thing I liked was Subhanwita and how she interacted with Arjun. I just mentioned how I liked Arjun being all puppy love with her, but on the opposite side of that, I also liked Subhanwita's POV of him and how she cared about him fiercely and had cute little soft smiles around him, too. It was almost like a college romance, in a way, where they stole glances, smiled, and had cute little conversations that I enjoyed.

The last thing I'll mention before moving into critiques is the overall chemistry between all the characters is good. Like with each other's families. Sometimes they fight, sometimes they love each other, sometimes they laugh, sometimes they frown. The relationship is always changing and going through different patches that reflect the natural state of life, and I think that's a very good thing since it gives the reader a solid look at what every character is like and how they interact with the world around them, so good job.

When it comes to critiques, my main one is that the grammar makes it hard to understand at times. Chapter 1 in particular has many errors with missing articles in front of nouns when needed (a/an, the), but there are errors throughout the story (like frequent comma errors where you did not have commas when you needed them) that make it hard to understand what you're trying to say sometimes, and that takes away from the chemistry because I have to reread sentences to make sure I understand what's even going on before I can so much as glance at the characters, so I would recommend using a free online grammar editing software, of which there are plenty out there.

Overall, Hard to love, Hard to lose has interesting chemistry between Arjun and Subhanwita. Both characters are fun to read about due to their varying personalities and engaging story together. While there were some grammar errors that made it hard to read at times, I still overall thought the chemistry was fun to read about.

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Picture Perfect by Jimins_hoeee

Review:

Picture Perfect does a good job immersing the reader in the scene with funky environments that will be memorable, like that opening scene in the bar is very memorable and does a great job making it... well, picture perfect! It sets the tone immediately and gets us in the mood to meet new people, and maybe our potential future soulmates. It really does have that almost college romance vibe to it where college students are meeting in a bar for the first time and are going to have a giddy life together. Maybe I'm just saying that since I'm a college kid, but I love those cute romance vibes it has.

And that leads me to my next point: great romance vibes, and I love the mutual pining and how this story focuses on them being cute with one another. Jungkook and Jiwoo had very cute interactions, and I like it when the two leads just... like each other. Maybe that sounds juvenile to say, but it's refreshing to see two leads who like each other a lot and want to know more about one another. It makes for a cute, fun read that will keep readers entertained, and that when matched with nice descriptions makes for a good time that I recommend to everyone!

The last thing I'll mention is I liked the overall chemistry between everyone, not just Jungkook and Jiwoo, but also Jiwoo with her friends, like Jin. I always love seeing Jin in fanfics, so I enjoyed his presence here and liked how he interacted with Jiwoo with his dad jokes and windshield wiper laugh. It was cute to see, and it's something I appreciate.

I have a handful of critiques. For one, I would recommend being careful with cliches. I have 0 problem with cliches and think they're over-hated. In fact, I encourage people to use cliches and take their own spins on it, so I'm not saying don't use cliches, but what I am saying is consider which ones you're using, since sometimes they did pull me out of the narrative. Most notably, using "orbs" to describe eyes. It's a really overused word, not to mention it can easily get mistaken as... uh... a part of a male's private parts (yes, I have seen many, many people genuinely think "orbs" was being used to describe the tennis balls of a man), so it just feels unnecessary in most cases, especially in fanfics since fanfics, BTS and HP ones in particular, have made the word "orbs" cliche, so that's why I suggest avoiding it.

That cliche thing was a smaller thing since it doesn't happen too frequently, and another small thing I'd like to point out is be careful with how many dialogue tags you're using since they can, when used too much, take a lot of emotion out of a scene since they can get repetitive and also risk putting too much emotion into the tags instead of the dialogue itself. So I'll recommend the 50-30 advice of dialogue for you. It doesn't work for everyone, but it can be a helpful guide! The 50-30 advice states that of your dialogue, aim to have 50% or less of it tagged, and of that 50%, 30% or more should be said or asked. So that's one piece of advice that could be helpful, but I encourage you to experiment and find what works for you!

The last thing I'll mention is something I go back and forth on how to feel about, and it's the JK POV in chapter 1 since it repeats most of the information we already know from Jiwoo's POV, and also the JK POV in chapter 2 is far more engaging, moves the plot forward more, and feels more in place, while the chapter 1 POV was okay, though felt like it went on a bit too long. So consider trimming it a bit or playing around with it in general, but I go back and forth on how to feel about it. It's a bit hard to explain my feelings on it, I just enjoyed the chapter 2 JK POV, so that made the chapter 1 JK POV feel less important and like it could have been trimmed and not much would be missing since chapter 2 fills in those gaps and shows Jungkook's mutual pining for Jiwoo while also moving the plot forward at the same time, though the chapter 1 POV doesn't do that (since, like I said, it's mostly information we already know from Jiwoo's POV in terms of the plot advancement). That may be a strange critique to have, but I still thought it was worth mentioning. I hope I make at least some sense here. I fear I don't since my mind is still trying to put it all into words, so I hope it makes some sense what I just said.

Overall, Picture Perfect provides a cute romance that I think many readers will enjoy. It has good chemistry between the two leads and also between Jiwoo and her friends, making it well-balanced. I had a handful of critiques, two small and one a little larger, but I overall thought the book had good chemistry.

THE SNOWMAN by BANGTANHOLIC_FICS

Review:

The Snowman delivers on some interesting characters and plotlines that will have readers invested in the story. When I saw the title The Snowman, I thought of the famous book and thought this was going to be like a murder mystery homage to it, though I was happy to see this was far more original and took a unique spin on the title. I mean, come on, a title like The Snowman stands out. What does a snowman have to do with creative writing? What could you possibly do with it? So I enjoyed the intrigue this book had and how you utilized it to keep readers, well, reading!

Moving into the chemistry itself, I thought it was interesting to see Taehyung and Y/n interacting with one another in the way that they did, starting with that fierce spark, mostly originating from Taehyung being so angry about the whole situation while Y/n was more accepting. I actually liked Y/n quite a bit in those beginning segments and thought she did a good job getting the reader invested since she seemed sweet and like a family girl willing to compromise for sake of family, which is an admirable trait.

The last thing I'll mention is while on the topic of Taehyung and Y/n's interactions, the thing I found most interesting was how they had such different perspectives on love. Taehyung was against it while Y/n believed in it and wanted to make Taehyung believe in it too, whether it was with her or someone else. It was interesting to see such varying perspectives, especially between two people slated to be married, so I enjoyed that aspect a lot.

I have a few critiques. I'll start small and then work my way up! For starters, I would recommend avoiding all caps or at least using them very sparingly for specific purposes, like maybe put just one or two words in all caps as opposed to entire sentences, simply because it can be distracting and take away from the emotion within the moment, if that makes sense. But that's a small thing that's not going to impact placement much.

Moving on, another small thing is I would recommend not using stuttering in text unless it's like for humor purposes, like someone is being humorous by including the stuttering in text. This is a really small thing and yet another thing that's no big deal, though sometimes characters would stutter in texts during serious moments, and it took away the serious tone almost immediately since no one really stutters in texts/thoughts like that, if that makes sense.

The last thing is the major thing: script format. By that I mean, you'll have fleshed-out descriptions that are very book-like, but you'll have dialogue that's script format, like this:

Y/n: Hi

Instead of: "Hi," Y/n said.

I bring this up as a big deal because script format is intended to be plain and rather neutral so actors have more room to add emotions and give it more spice, so when it's used in a book, it can make the dialogue feel flat at times, and also unengaging. That's why I advise against using a hybrid between book and script format and suggest sticking with one or the other. However, if you want to write scripts, that's great! I love scriptwriting, so I encourage you to do so, and I recommend using the free version of Celtx if you're interested in writing full scripts since that program (you can Google it and it'd show up) formats everything, so you don't have to worry about the specific formatting stuff and can write more freely.

So I suggest avoiding script format for dialogue since dialogue is a major part of the chemistry between characters, like how they play off each other and how their conversations flow, and script format can take away from some of the emotions, if that makes sense!

Overall, The Snowman has many strengths that will have readers coming back to see more of it, and I think the chemistry is interesting. I just suggest some tweaks to the grammar and presentation so the chemistry flows smoother, if that makes sense, though I think you're definitely in a good spot and have creative ideas I hope you'll show more of in the future!

Lost in Heaven by shukurenai2009

Review:

I'll start right off the bat by saying I was already intrigued by the title of the story being Lost in Heaven, which sounds pretty, so I was excited to see what you would come up with, and I think you did a good job with the chemistry in this book. The main chemistry is between Y/n and Shu, though Shu has friends who tease him (more on this in the next paragraph), and I thought their chemistry together was solid, too. Y/n and Shu had overall good chemistry where they bounced off each other well.

Another thing was I liked Shu throughout the narrative and thought he was always so in love with Y/n. I could almost imagine the puppy eyes he was giving her throughout the entire story, haha. It was cute to see him get teased for having feelings for her, but also not teased so much that it started to get obnoxious and overdone, so you did a good job having a great balance between the banter and the serious plot progression.

The last thing I'll mention before getting into critiques is that I liked the ending a lot. I thought it did a great job wrapping up the storyline with Shu and Y/n, and I thought Shu, once again, was awesome in that ending moment where he encouraged Y/n to take back her freedom and independence, to which she accepted. So I thought you did a great job wrapping up their love story, which is imperative to creating good chemistry between the leads and maintaining it.

I have a handful of critiques, two being grammatical and one being more of a creative suggestion, so I'll start with the grammatical since those critiques don't matter as much to the chemistry as the creative suggestion does.

To start, there were very frequent grammar and spelling errors that broke immersion, and the reason I bring this up is because it also slipped into dialogue and hurt the chemistry at times. For example: "Your looking so beautiful like an angle..." (chap 4). The your needs to be you're, and angel is misspelled as angle here. So I would recommend using free online grammar editing software if you're interested. Reading out loud also is very helpful.

The next thing is the script format I spoke about before in past reviews. I won't go into it here since I've explained it before, I'm only saying it to say it did factor into the placement because dialogue is a major part of chemistry between leads, so the dialogue could be strengthened to help with the chemistry.

The last thing is the creative suggestion I have, and it's to consider fleshing out the POVs more. When you switch to a specific POV, like Shu's, most of them go by really, really fast. One of them was only for two sentences, that's how fast they can go by. So my suggestion is to consider fleshing out the POVs more to give them more purpose. Seeing someone's thoughts and feelings can massively impact the chemistry and how much readers enjoy the characters. For example, one way you can do this is during the scene where Shu is showed the wedding picture. Consider fleshing out that moment more since he's shown the picture and then says "Alright" and nothing more happens in his thoughts (chap 8). Consider having that be in Shu's POV and have him react in his mind accordingly. So that's one way you can flesh out the POVs more, but I encourage you to play around with it and find what works for you!

Overall, Lost in Heaven has a lot of charm and intrigue matched with a good ending that will have readers smiling when they finish reading it. I had a few critiques regarding grammar and POV, but that doesn't change that readers will smile and feel inspired after reading it.

Temptation by Seong_Grace

Review:

Temptation has a lot of cute characteristics to it that make it stand out from other stories on Wattpad. For example, one of the things I liked a lot about it was Jimin being unable to brake to save his life. It was a cute little quirk of his that I found funny to read about, and it also opened up doors for Y/n and him to banter, where she gave him glares for braking so suddenly while he was just happy to be in her presence, which was cute.

Another thing I enjoyed was how protective and caring Jin was over others in the book, like Jimin and how they interacted in chapter 15. That's a smaller thing to point out, but I enjoyed that since it was good chemistry between friends. The chemistry between Y/n and Jimin was interesting to read about, too, which is of course important since they are the romance here.

The last thing I'll mention before moving into critiques was I like the overall chemistry between Jimin, JK, and Taehyung. The three bounced off each other really well. Chemistry of course extends beyond just the two leads, so I think you did a good job making the chemistry well-rounded between all of the characters, but particularly with the brotherly relationship with Jimin and his best friends since they bounced off each other really well.

Moving into critiques, the writing is a little inconsistent, and I would suggest a bit more consistency so the readers can follow along and become more attached to the characters. For example, the prologue has many grammar errors that make it hard to read with missing articles and some word order issues, and I would suggest going back in and editing it, but chapter 1 has overall good grammar and seems like it was written completely differently than the prologue. At the same time, chapter 3 is again written differently than chapters 1 and 2 where the dialogue tags are below the dialogue when they weren't before, which got distracting very quickly, especially considering it wasn't like that in chapters 1 and 2 (but was like that in the prologue), and later in that same chapter, the tags go back to being where they should be, so the style is different within the chapter itself. So I would just suggest some more consistency with the writing style since that's a big part of investing readers in the story and investing them in the chemistry between Y/n and Jimin.

While on the topic, be careful with confusing dialogue since there were several moments throughout where the dialogue was super confusing to know who was speaking it because of how it was structured. I'll provide two examples. First one: "No, I won't stop until I k/ll him with my bare hands," Lisa continued dragging her away as the guards chuckled.... The dialogue belongs to Y/n, but you using a comma at the end of it and having Lisa be the first subject we see implies it's Lisa's dialogue, not Y/n's, so I'd recommend splitting it. A simple fix could be:

"No, I won't stop until I k/ll him with my bare hands!"

Lisa continued dragging her away as the guards chuckled...

Another example is from chapter 2:

Dipping his hand into his pocket, a smirk formed on Jimin's lips. "What kept you waiting, sir?"

That's not Jimin's dialogue. Again, that's Y/n's dialogue, but Jimin is the subject of the sentence, implying Jimin is the one speaking, so that's why I recommend splitting this again and giving Y/n a dialogue tag here so we know it's her. We spent the entire chapter with Jimin so far, and Y/n only recently appeared, so Jimin's the core subject. Attaching a different person's dialogue to an action performed by another person makes it look like it's that person who's performing the action's dialogue and no one else's, so that's why I suggest making sure dialogue flows smoothly in that regard since that's very important for chemistry not only between the leads but between the entire cast.

The last thing I'll mention is be careful with telling the reader what to feel during tense moments where the chemistry is supposed to shine the most. Like in chapter two, when Y/n and Jimin are alone together and getting a bit handsy, there's this: Things were getting heated! That's a line I didn't feel you needed, and it felt a little forced in, in my opinion. So just be careful with those kinds of lines where you're telling the reader exactly what to think instead of letting them get fully immersed in the moment. I hope that makes sense.

Overall, Temptation has cute quirks and characteristics that will have readers laughing and engaging with the text, and that cuteness is matched with other good traits, like solid chemistry between the best friends of the book, leading to well-balanced chemistry. I had some critiques regarding the presentation of the chemistry, though it's all in all pretty good.

The Whimsical Coquette by strawberry1d

Review:

To start, I like the luxury and the description of clothes and things like that. I like to start with the small things and make my way up, so this is a small thing, but I enjoyed the luxury that feels like a nice homage to Business Proposal, which this story is based on. It also added more to Jimin's character, and seeing as he's one of two leads, I appreciated that, so I overall liked how you handled the descriptions, especially with the descriptions of clothing and other luxurious items, like the jewelry.

Another thing I liked was Jungkook's role in the story, and I wasn't expecting it. I liked how he tied into Jimin's role in the book as well. I liked Jungkook both in terms of him as a character and how he interacted with the world and other characters around him, which is important for getting readers more invested in what's going on, after all. Now we know how Jungkook reacts to everything around him, not just himself, making him well-balanced, and that's a major part of chemistry because chemistry is more than just romantic chemistry, it's also how the characters interact with one another, and I think Jungkook is a highlight there.

The last thing I'll mention before getting into critiques is I enjoyed the chemistry between Jimin and pretty much everyone he engages with since Jimin's a very likeable character in this. That relates to the last point, but expanding on it, I think every character who is present throughout the narrative does a good job bouncing off of Jimin and making the chemistry feel more realistic and engaging to read about.

I have a couple of critiques. One is more of a confusion than a critique, but I was a little confused with the choice to have so much German in it. To me, it didn't make much sense for Minola to be speaking so much German in her mind for a multitude of reasons. For one, she was still born and raised in Korea and lived in Germany with multiple Korean friends, so it wasn't like she was exclusively speaking German; in fact, she spent far longer speaking Korean than German. German is her second language, not her first. I learned Korean for almost as long as she was in Germany in a university setting like her, yet I don't think in Korean. The second reason is it slows the pace unnaturally since now we have two sets of text instead of one. Thirdly, it creates a problem: what language are Minola and Jimin speaking? Are they speaking Korean or English? You clearly mark German as German, so why aren't you marking Korean as Korean? I can't imagine every character is only speaking English in South Korea. So now it's confusing. Are we supposed to pretend they're speaking Korean even though we see English? If that's the case, why isn't the German the same way? So it's slowing the pace since now we have to sit through sometimes really long thoughts in German and then read another long paragraph of the translation, there's no clear purpose to including the German, and it creates confusion about what we're supposed to pretend is a different language versus what actually is. So consider limiting how much German is used, at least in character thoughts. I hope all that makes sense.

But like I said, that was more of a confusion than a critique, so moving into core critiques, I would recommend more diversity with the way you go about following the show. A lot of the chemistry between Jimin and Minola is borrowed from Business Proposal, down the first meeting being almost word-for-word identical to it, but these are new characters, not Tae-moo and Hari, so there should be differences between how they approach situations. It makes it less engaging than it could be, and it also makes their chemistry not feel original to them.

I also say this since kdramas are the cliche of cliches (as much as I enjoy them), so I definitely recommend splitting off from the drama more and playing around with it since while there's nothing inherently wrong with cliches, overusing them can make the story not as engaging as it otherwise could be, so I encourage you to play around with it and take the dialogue in particular in your own unique way! That's not to say you don't deviate from it because you absolutely do, though when it comes to dialogue in particular and the chemistry between Minola and Jimin, consider diversifying some of the dialogue so it's more original to your book and not taken right from Business Proposal, if that makes sense.

Overall, The Whimsical Coquette has cute elements to it that will make readers interested in continuing to read, particularly with the character of Jungkook and how Jimin is able to bounce off the characters around him pretty well, and the cherry on top is overall good descriptions, particularly for that of luxurious items. I had a few critiques regarding the main romance and the chemistry between them, though I all in all think this story has potential to keep growing into a charming romantic book.