Alone (REDO)
Me: Yes! My friend redid this lemon which, disclaimer, I still haven't read lol... not that I'm planning to XD I only read the a/ns XD
Double(I call her this in the gc so it's normal XD but she's still that good ol' Doitsu you know XD): Did my young lemons even give you a nosebleed? Those are now part of what I call "The time I was new in writing smut because who tf even reads these".
I wanted to redo one of my lemons because it was cringy and I don't even know what my mind what was telling me (r.i.p). Imagine what 12-year-old me thought about t.
When I look back at it, I would think "God, what was I doing?" and mentally slap myself for writing a lemon for the first time. Reading lemons on Wattpad and Fanfiction.net was worth it, though. The purpose of that first lemon was to test my skills on how much lemon knowledge I received from reading the lemons that I saved (privately, duh). Since I was 12 when I wrote it, I just put in what I wanted to make a person nosebleed from reading it.
Since I am redoing this lemon, I will alter events that happened in the old one and change them into different ones for this revised version.
Okay, you're still reading this?
Pairing: ChuNi
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Japan sighed softly as he slipped his fingers inside his pants and boxers and prodded his entrance. He bit down on the collar of his shirt before slipping one finger in, gasping a little. Gripping the sheets with his free hand, he slowly thrusted his finger in and out, moaning silently, careful not to wake up China (who was sleeping in the room right next to his).
The Japanese inserted a second finger and a third and thrusted them slowly while burying his face in the pillow. "A-Ah..." He breathed out, curling his fingers inside. Feeling unsatisfied, he pulled his fingers out and opened the drawer of the nightstand and pulled out a small vibrator that was connected to a controller. Japan flipped himself over and supported himself with his knees, pulling his pants and boxers down.
Balancing himself, he took the vibrator in one hand and inserted it inside him. Bracing himself for the contact, he grabbed the controller and switched it on to low vibration.
Japan gasped as the vibrations shot up to his lower body, his knees becoming a little jelly as he tried to maintain his position.
He let out silent but shaky moans, the low vibration pleasuring him. The Japanese spread his legs a little, using one hand to stroke himself. A part of him visualized China doing it to him. Japan blushed at the thought and reached for the controller to turn the vibration to medium.
Japan's body moved to the vibration, rocking his hips as he pushed the vibrator inside him deeper. He let out a loud moan as the toy hit his sweet spot, already ignoring the fact that he might wake China up. "Motto...motto..." He breathed out, already in (dirty) dream land.
He snaked a hand to the controller and turned it up to high vibration. "Hyaaaa!" The Japanese breathed out, gripping on the bed sheets with both of his hands, the pleasure building up inside him. He felt his orgasm get closer and closer as his body shook to the vibration. Pre-cum dripped from his length as Japan cried out in pleasure, cumming on the bed sheets.
Japan panted as he calmed himself down from his orgasm, turning off the vibrator and pulling it out of him. Maintaining his position, he weakly reached for the drawer of the nightstand and opened it to get another toy.
He gripped the base of the toy and shifted his position so that he was facing his left side. The Japanese lined the toy to his entrance before penetrating himself. He gasped as he began to thrust it, gripping the pillow under his head with his free hand.
He spread his legs a little to penetrate himself deeper. He let out shaky moans at the feeling of the toy scraping his walls. Japan twisted is around slightly and cummed after a few more thrusts.
He panted again to calm himself down and tried to stand up to clean himself when the door burst open. Japan jumped as China stood at the door with a tomato red face. One thought crossed his mind: Was he listening to him masturbate the whole time?!
"Um..." China began, trying to direct his eyes away at the sight of Japan's butt in the air and a cum puddle below him. Japan imediately flipped himself over and tried to cover the two toys behind him. "I can explain..." Japan trailed, his face also red.
China closed the door and climbed on the bed, crawling close to Japan and lifted his chin. "How about a little fun, aru~?"
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Double: I had to look at the old version (it's still cringy) just to make changes, lol.
Changes made: Removed the good night greeting in the beginning, removed Japan entering his room after China fell asleep, changed the beginning, changed the position Japan was in, removed the sweat and the heat in the room, added some fingering, added extra moves, added moans that correspond to the action done from the toy, added China listening outside by the door, added China entering the room after Japan finished playing with himself, removed the next day ending
The only change I didn't make is the referring of THAT toy (Calling it by the name makes me uncomfortable but whatever)
If you noticed (if you actually did), I did more research on the vibrator Japan used (the old version used a standard bigger version of the vibrator, you know, the shape, okay, you probably don't get what I mean). In this new version, he used the smaller, bullet-shaped type that is connected to a controller, the switch is a circle where you have to rotate it using your thumb or your whole hand (depending on how you hold it). By rotating it, you can control the vibration (low, medium or high). Clockwise to increase it and counter-clockwise to decrease it and turn it off. The shape that I described is one of the two common vibrators that can be found.
Oh wow, I just gave you a lemon lesson of the day. XD (Starting from this lemon, I will give out lessons of the day on every lemon I write for you to write a good lemon. Whoa, I'm a teacher! XD)
Hope you enjoyed the revised version of this. A revised version of part 2 will be out soon.
P.S: Never enter the R18 section/second floor of Ikebukuro, Animate in Japan. You will be filled with awkwardness. Don't repeat the same mistake I almost did.
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