Judge: Hells07dealer

Flawsome Tales by a_purple_girl

Title (4/5)

The title is lovely and truly amazing. It completely makes sense with the chapters that no one is perfect and everyone has their own flaws. 

Cover (2/5)

The cover was simple and cute but you can make it a little more attractive. 

Blurb (1/5)

There is nothing in the blurb except for providing information that it is a oneshot series. I would recommend you to write some beautiful quotes to make it look more interesting 

First paragraphs [Alternates for 1st Chapters] (5/5) 

The first paragraphs of all the oneshots are written very beautifully. I just loved them. They are so naturally attractive 

Grammer and vocabulary (12/15)

The vocabulary is pretty good, however you should improve the grammar a little more, if you are writing any oneshot make sure to write it in past tense only if there are no dialogues used 

Pace (8/10)

The pace for each oneshot was good and very few felt low or lagging. 

Plot (13/15)

The plots are amazing. Writing plot for different onehsots with unique and different ideas is actually hard and time taking. However you have taken great ideas and converted them beautifully into the oneshots. 

Writing style (6/10) 

The writing style is pretty good but since it is a oneshot book, I would recommend you to use more dialogues as you have to complete it in one chapter only. 

 Emotions (10/10)

The emotions are displayed well even in short. 

Character development (4/10)

Taking it as oneshots the character did not have any specific developments neither was there any specific way to show it Overall enjoyment (9/10)I truly enjoyed reading these oneshots. They were heartfelt and short thus did not take much time but truly entertained. 

Total (74/100)

Wildest Dreams by minnyurii

Title (5/5)

The title is amazing and attractive and suits with the story. 

Cover (4/5)

The cover is pretty simple but looks good. I would recommend you to add any quote or one of the lines from your story. 

Blurb (3/5)

The blurb is pretty attractive and enticing and gives a good spoiler about the story. 

First chapter (3/5)

The first chapter was amazing but felt a little slow according to the no. Of chapters. 

Grammer and vocabulary (12/15)

The vocabulary is absolutely amazing and the Grammer is a little dull but the way words are used and inconvincibly 

Pace (8/10)

The pace for each oneshot was good and very few felt low or lagging. 

Plot (10/15)

The plot is simple but the way it is executed is fabulous. I loved that they both finally achieved a successful carrier and even if they are not together their stories are.... and so are their hearts..... and the whole Daegu knows this. However there was some problems like how yn left with her family as soon as they came to take her. I mean though they had differences based on their qualities and background, they didn't even tried to stand up for love. They should have at least defended it was as if they already thought that they can't do anything and they gave up. 

Writing style (8/10)

The writing style is amazing, because of writing style only the simple story was turned into these amazing lines. 

Emotions (10/10)

The emotions are displayed very well. No doubt at that 

Character development (4/10)

The character development was pretty fast according to me , like yes you showed that their career evolves after few years but maybe you could describe it more. 

Overall enjoyment (9/10) 

I completely enjoyed reading the story though I would have loved it more if you gave and actual happy ending as it was an open ending but than again if it was an happy ending. The story would not have been very enhancing. 

Total (76/100)

Tales of Heart by aurora_2604

Title (5/5)

The title is beautiful and fits with the story. It represents each story of each heart.Cover (4/5)The cover is lovely, neat and well edited. 

Blurb (1/5)

There is no blurb except that information that it is a oneshot book. You can add some quotes.

First paragraphs (4/5)

The first paragraphs are pretty good of each chapter.

Grammer and vocabulary (11/15)

The vocabulary is very simple. Though you did not use very unique words, still the way sentences are written is nice. Though I would recommend you to use some attractive synonyms.

Pace (7/10)

The pace of the oneshots is good.

Plot (12/15)

The plots are pretty simple and good and I liked that you gave warning for mature chapters.

Writing style (8/10)

The writing style is good.

Emotions (6/10)

The emotions are displayed well but you can enhance them more.

Character development (8/10)

There was very minimal character development regarding it as a oneshot.

Overall enjoyment (9/10)

The onehsots were good enjoyable.

Total (75/100)

Macabre  Murder by 50shadesofvkook

Title (2/5) 

The title is unique and but does not fit completely with the story as the story.

Cover (3/5)

The cover is amazing but instead of no face it will look better if you use real face as it will blend well with the surroundings.

Blurb (1/5)

The blurb is simple and it just like a very very short summary. It is not interesting or attractive enough.

First chapter (2/5)

The first chapter felt all bit a little off. It does not interest readers to read it further. The first chapter should be more enticing based on the facts that it is a horror and mystery story.

Grammer and vocabulary (9/15)

The vocabulary was very simple and not much attractive. The Grammer Is good.

Pace (8/10)

The pace for the story was good. It was not too fast or too slow though writing 2 chapters including slight smut and smut would not be a very good idea according to the total no. Of parts.

Plot (6/15)

The plot is good but you could have carried it out in a better way, the manuscript looked a lot fake like yes manuscripts are hard to write but still the way characters are over acted in story was completely off for me. I actually did not even wanted to continue the story taking it did not interest me to read anymore.

Writing style (8/10)

The writing style is good but make sure to show the conversion of pov whenever you jump from real life to story.

Emotions (3/10)

The emotions are displayed not well enough. Even though it should be a horror story most of its part felt like a humor genre.

Character development (4/10)

There was no character development as it was a manuscript. The only interesting character was Cheonsoo due to the last twist.

Overall enjoyment (5/10)

The story was good but you can do better.

Total (51/100)

Judge: armykoyola

Caught in a Lie by taetebts

Title (5/5)

I loved the title. It explains the concept of the story well. It's kept thoughtful. 

Blurb(4.5/5)

The blurb is amazing. That one line shows enough of what it will be. But there is this one little mistake. It needs to be: "Jimin ululated continuously trying to get rid of the devil."

Cover(5/5)

I loved the cover. It provides everything I need with the perfect font, colors, and theme.

First chapter (5/5)

It's a one-shot, so there is a chapter only. But if we speak of the start then it's great because it binds us to read further.

Grammar and vocabulary(15/15)

The vocabulary is dead-drop good. I am amazed by the right choice of words. And the grammar was good enough as well.

Pace (8/10)

I feel that it was a bit fast-paced when the flashback was shown. It would be great if some more scenes could be added before his father sent him to the asylum. Because that would show why his father got tired of him. Because then the horror essence of the tale would be perfectly shown. I feel that was missing

Plot (15/15)

The plot is great. It's unique because not everyone decides to take this topic to create a story. You have the potential to create many more such stories. It showed me how we can pull a story with just a character.

Writing style (10/10)

I like that the author takes a gap between moving on to the next scene, which gives readers a break as well. This is what I like to see in writing style. It was wonderful the way the scenario was created through this.

Emotions (10/10)

You will be able to connect with the character. It makes your heart feel the pain he is in. When you start imagining the scenario there is no chance that you won't cry. The way it's written helps portray those emotions.

Character development (9/10)

I have one issue with the character which is that when the flashback was shown with the first incident being the dog one it was good. But how did he get this, I mean what is the source of that devil inside of him? If that was also shown, wouldn't it be more fascinating? Although, the character from the first line till the end developed well because you can see him being angry, irritated, and bothered but when you approach you can see him accepting whatever it is. That's his development. It's painful as hell but this is great to depict this.

Overall Enjoyment (9/10)

I enjoyed it because I don't read horror stories. I watch them, I watch everything about horror but reading something like this is my second time. Which I enjoyed but being someone who loves horror themes I felt something was missing. I was confused too like many others. As I said if that source or something he did by mistake in childhood, or it's in his home that is shown maybe at the end of the epilogue is added then it might be a masterpiece. All the best, you have done a great job, author!!

Total (95.5/100)

Book: Love Story by -Hxmx_phxbic

Title (3/5)

The title right now is good. But it would be great if you would play with words and give some unique title to your one-shot book.

Blurb (4/5)

I loved the blurb. The line over there is pretty good too. But you don't have to write Bangtan Sonyeondan because you have already mentioned it as BTS one-shots.

Cover (3/5)

I feel that the cover can be better than this. It's good but the pictures are not enhanced, and the font is hardly visible. The cover doesn't have to be iconic because I have seen those books winning too whose cover wasn't great. But at least the title should be visible so that the readers can be attracted.

First chapter (2.5/5)

I loved the story of the first chapter. But it's too short, it ended quickly. It has a lot of grammatical mistakes. When y/n's pov was ending and when a/n pov started was very sudden. Tell the readers about the situation they faced after they told their parents. That would hook the readers. Those heavy emotions will connect readers' hearts to the story. I felt it was just a little plot written down. I would love to read hard emotions in it because the concept is good. It's not the same where two people are forced to be together and then they fall in love. It's different, it speaks out about LGBTQS which I loved to see. So, you have come up with a great concept but if you would enhance your writing skills and edit the grammatical mistakes this chapter will turn out to be great.

Grammar and vocabulary (5.5/15)

There are a lot of grammatical mistakes in the further chapters too. There are mistakes in punctuation marks as well, please kindly look after that author.

Chapter 1: The spelling of hello in Korean is wrong. It should be "By the way, are you single? Because I have a friend who is a lesbian too. You know, if you would love then I can help you two meet."

Chapter 2: Be careful of where to put capital letters. It should be: "I thought or I felt that taking him to my home is the only way he would open his heart to me" "Laying his body on the couch I went to take a shower. While washing my body I remembered that I had forgotten to bring my clothes." Then should not be fighting, doesn't seem like a good emotion, you can write dancing. "After some time, our bodies also started dancing with the same rhythm as our tongue did." His suit was lying on the floor. There is a problem with tenses also which I can see. It will be tough to write all of it. But I am trying to suggest it all to you. I feel you should use Grammarly which will help with so much. Many authors use it including me. And I you need help I am always there.

Pace (4/10)

The pace is too fast in most of the chapters. As I mentioned in the "first chapter". As a reader, I would love an elaborate chapter with different scenes of the characters. For example, It would be great if readers were told why y/n hates Taehyung. How suddenly Jimin and y/n fell in love, how he proposed. It started well and ended on a strange note. If the scenes were depicted well, it would be mesmerizing to read. You have so much potential inside of you, author.

Plot (12/15)

The plot is good actually. I loved it. They are common but sometimes common plots work like magic. They just need an enhancement. Which you can do and I am sure the book will turn out to be great.

Writing style (6/10)

It is good, simple. I love such a sweet, simple writing style that is not messed up. But because of so many errors, it breaks my flow of reading and I get distracted by the mistakes.

Emotions (7/10)

Show some flashback scenes and conversations that will tell the readers about the characters' emotions. It's important, that's how a reader connects with the story. For example: In the third chapter, describe what happened because of which y/n couldn't be a mom and how devastating it was for the couple.

Character development (6/10)

The stories are so fast-paced that you can hardly tell about character development. If that is improved all the stories can be turned into beautiful tales.

Overall Enjoyment (7/10)

I had fun reading the stories. Because I am a fan of simple tales. Too many messed-up tales are sometimes hard to understand. But simple tales can leave an impact on the heart only if they are perfectly and innovatively written. The stories are great, and the book is thought beautifully. You can do wonders with this, please keep going and don't feel demotivated. This all is for you to enhance your skills. I hope it helps you and if you need more help then you can speak to me anytime. I would love to help. All the best, keep it up!!

Total (60/100)

Book: Wish by Cool_Summer29

Title (5/5)

I wanted to ask the author why such a simple one-word when the author can come up with great titles. But reading chapter by chapter I understood that it's all about those wishes which we have daily. It's not about the main lead wish but so many small and harsh wishes from their families, friends, and so on. And especially that one last WISH!

Blurb (5/5)

It's just one line. And that's enough, it made me curious. What wish? Whose wish? I like it.

Cover (5/5)

I love the cover. It's creative and I loved the fonts used. The way the name and title are placed is unique and beautiful.

First chapter (5/5)

I first felt that maybe it was too short when I started reading it. But later I realized it was necessary to stop at that many sentences because the last line written there made me curious to keep on reading.

Grammar and vocabulary (15/15)

There are no grammatical mistakes or errors. I love the beautiful vocab.

Pace (10/10)

The pace is according to the story. You can understand every emotion without having the feeling of being rushed. Every chapter is coined beautifully.

Plot (15/15)

Well, it's one of the most unique plots I have read so far on Wattpad. This made me think of my favorite author, they used to give such exotic and twisted plots. My emotions are too high after reading it. I won't give spoilers, if you want to know why I say that, please read the book.

Writing style (10/10)

The writing style is unique. Why I say that is because the lines are placed well. They are used and highlighted in the right place. Perfect breaking of paragraphs. I find it interesting to read line by line which made it easy for me to read without interruption.

Emotions (10/10)

I felt after days that's why I am saying it, it's a roller coaster of emotions. It will make you speechless. You can connect with all those emotions shown in every sentence.

Character development (10/10)

The characters were introduced beautifully. I didn't feel they were lagging somewhere. Also, it gave a great ending to the characters, all of them.

Overall Enjoyment (10/10)

I am sorry, I don't have words to express how much I enjoyed it. I don't think it's a book that needs judging. It's an epic tale. It made me feel so many emotions that can't be explained. I loved the book, is a very small statement to what I experienced while reading it. It's perfect, author. Please keep writing more for people like me at least!

Total (100/100)

Book: His Rental Girlfriend by ViniShah2

Title (5/5)

I loved the title. Because it's perfect, just what we need for the book.

Blurb (5/5)

The blurb made me interested in the story. It's perfect, the length is great.

Cover (5/5)

I love the cover. The font is perfect, and the aesthetic of the cover is pretty.

First chapter (5/5)

They are well introduced in the prologue. Though only Jungkook is introduced still it's a perfect start for the book's concept.

Grammar and vocabulary (15/15)

The vocabulary used by the author makes it easy and fun to read. I found only one mistake in the whole book which was easily ignored.

Chapter 6: "Neither did Jimin explain how he obtained her address" Second paragraph, second line.

Pace (10/10)

The story goes smooth as butter. It reveals what is required at what particular time. Just the right amount of information in every chapter.

Plot (15/15)

It's not a common story for Wattpad. But for me, it was a common concept because I am aware of this rental concept through dramas and other things. So, this is the perfect example of how to make a common plot a masterpiece. This is beautiful. The twist is not what I was expecting. I was thinking while reading the story it might be the same story. I know what is coming up next and it kept happening in the same way for the next few chapters. But my mind was blown by the reveal. The author played so well with our minds through their amazing writing skills.

Writing style (10/10)

This is one of the best writing skills you will find on the platform. I felt so engrossed with the way the author was binding me chapter by chapter with their writing skills. The way you're given information and left hanging also makes you curious to keep going without stopping anywhere.

Emotions (10/10)

You will feel so strongly for every character while reading it. My heart and brain kept contemplating with which character I should sympathize with but the emotions were shown so well that my heart kept swaying away for each one of them.

Character development (10/10)

I love the character of Jungkook. I know the people who read the book will say why not Ara but I felt him the most. We can make mistakes out of love but that doesn't make us the bad person, right? And this is exactly what the character of Jungkook taught me. They all had their ups and downs and they made their way. I didn't feel at any point that any character was kept weak. They grew so well as the plot kept moving. And over here I am not talking only about the main leads but all the supporting characters too, like Taehyung's father (not gonna reveal the plot) or say Namjoon or Jimin or if Yoongi comes then he is also not displaced anywhere. I loved it.

Overall Enjoyment (10/10)

I was thinking while reading the story it might be the same story, but then there must be a reason that it's featured by Wattpad. I thought I knew what was coming up next and it kept happening in the same way for the next few chapters. But my mind was blown by the reveal. The author played so well with our minds through their amazing writing skills. I am truly amazed. Well done, author!

Total (100/100)