Username: Mintchoclatechip29 

Nickname: Mint, Minty Character 

Name: Thistleheart

Reason for name: Has thorn-like markings curling around her legs

 Previous names: Thistlekit, Thistlepaw 

Makes sense!

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Future names: Thistlestar 

Oo a leader! Let's hope this isn't a Mary Sue!

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Role: Leader 

Wait, I thought she was currently a warrior? I'm a bit confused but I think u mean she is currently a leader, but next time pls don't put her name as Thistleheart, put it as Thistlestar!

2/3 for the confusion, sorry!

Appearance: Dark gray with a white tipped tail and thistle-like markings curling around her legs. A full white chest and belly, with white ears and pale green eyes 

She seems very pretty! But I think it could be a little more detailed. Maybe size? Is she plump or thin? Maybe thick furred? Muscular? Also her gender like, a dark gray she cat with a white tipped tail and that

7/10, I can picture her but idk for the length of the fur, or how big she is! But I can picture her design!

Personality: A confident cat with a strong sense of justice, Thistleheart will stop at nothing to achieve what she thinks is right. Heavily protective of her friends and brother, with little to none concerns to her safety. In her eyes, giving her life up to the Clan to make it safer for moons to come is better than just dying in her sleep. That strong sense of justice and good for the Clan also makes her rather vulnerable, as someone in the past has been able to sway her into doing something horrible when convinced that it would benefit the Clan

Oo! I like how she is loyal to the clan, but doesn't realise she is making it worse when she does! Sometimes ppl make mistakes, I'm glad she isn't perfect, and she can be a little dumb! But I think you could add a few more traits- is she playful? Maybe can be rude? Is she respectful and obedient?

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 Mother: Whitebelly - Dark brown and white tabby with pale green eyes 

Father: Riverfall - Dark grey tom with amber eyes 

Littermates: Thornstripe - Dark brown tabby tom with a white tips tail and paws, dark green eyes

 Backstory: Born into the ThunderClan nursery, around the same time as one of her friends, Scarletface, Thistlekit devoted her entire life and being to protecting the blind kit, even after her friend's parents where exiled for murder. However, as they became apprentices and Scarletpaw grew more and more....violent, Thistlepaw convinced herself it was just a phase, and that her friend would get over it soon. Thornpaw, along with his two friends, Mistpaw and Fallpaw, tried in vain to convince her that Scarletpaw was bad news, but Thistlepaw refused to listen. After all, Scarletpaw was her friend, how could she be anything but that? That was, until the five of them received their warrior names, that the newly named Scarletface and Thistleheart went aside. Scarletface knew exactly where-to convince Thistleheart to get her revenge against ThunderClan for the exile of her parents. After a few moons, Thistleheart agreed to help, thinking it was for the good of the Clan. It wasn't. Cat after cat was picked off, either by Scarletface or Thistleheart herself. The entire time, Thistleheart kept trying to convince herself that this was for the good of the Clan. Until Scarletface was caught killing Thornstripe and Mistfur at the Moonpool by none other than Thistleheart. Scarletface once again to tried to convince Thistleheart that this was, once again, for the good of the Clan, but Thistleheart finally saw through the charade. In a fit of rage, she lunged at Scarletface, and the two fought. Thistleheart triumphed, but the weight of her sins and how she had a hand of harming the Clan was to much to bear. She went straight to her leader, Blazingstar, and confessed, and was placed in temporary exile for 36 moons. Thistleheart agreed, and when she returned, 36 moons later, as promised, she arrived in the middle of an invasion by another Clan. Joining into the fray, she helped her Clan that she had killed from from being slaughtered. Blazingstar, ever grateful, let her back into the Clan. Moons later, with Thistleheart working tirelessly, she was made deputy, and then Thistlestar. She never forgave herself for her actions, and expects to be put in the Dark Forest when she dies, which she is fine with.

This is a great backstory! But idk how she could believe killing her Clan will help it... when she is a warrior, she should have learned it wouldn't help at all. And I don't think exiled cats could ever become deputies, even if they helped in a fight. They might have been able to win without the help. But I can see her backstory clearly, and it is good! And she might enter StarClan, bc Ashfur did. In addition, I don't think Blazingstar could be that blind. The dead bodies would have scent, and claw marks in with the fur of the killer. And they would have exiled innocent cats accidentally in the process. But overall, the backstory is good, but could have a little working on.

40/45

Likes: Her brother, sunny days, greenleaf, and spider webs 

That's cool! Spider webs is a bit random, but of course everyone likes random things! But for her brother, the backstory doesn't include him at all, and readers won't know much about him. Maybe include him a little in the backstory, so ppl know who he is?

4/5

Dislikes: Twoleg places, leaf-bare, the spiders themselves, foxes 

Ha, the spiderweb situation makes sense! It happens with me too.  All of it makes sense

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Other: Thistlestar did not take a mate and kits in her life, despite maybe having a small crush of Fallpaw, now Fallfrost, but thinks it would get in the way of her leadership duties. Also extremely distrustful of anyone and everyone, especially those closest to her.

I get how she didn't take a mate and kits, as ppl say 'it's against the code'. It's not, but it makes sense not to do it anyway. I'm confused of distrustful, do you mean she is extremely open to anyone and everyone, especially those closest to her? A bit confused there, and if u mean she is the opposite, I'm a bit confused bc that doesn't rlly make sense.

4/5

Overall, this is a great cat! It has a mixture of good and bad, which I like! 

I just recommend to include the brother in the backstory a bit, and maybe not make her leader so easily. A bit more details in the appearance, and then it would be perfect! 

Good job :D

Mintchoclatechip29