You might be asking yourself right now why is Dawn doing one of her own characters? Because I love this character and want to review. I shall try to do an honest review.

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Name: Apricot

Like the fruit? 

Nickname: Apricot

The fruit again? 

Preferred Name: Apricot

What is up with this character and fruit. 

Name In Past: Rachel McClain

So she is a McClain? Nice. 

Name In Future: Apricot Kogane

Married to Keith? Noice. 

Reason For Name: Her bright orange hair. 

As I expected. 

Species Known At Start: Human

Humans are idiots, so am I. 

Species Known During: Human and Vultull

What's a Vultull? Oh I know because I created them, a species who are these giant creatures. Their legs are hooves like goats. They have like a long strong snake-like tail. About three times taller than a human. They are very lizard-like, they have three-clawed hands with two large claws and one smaller claw on each hand. They also have a lion's mane and large fang-tusks on their faces that are very lizard-like. When they breed with other races the Vultull form only comes out when they are either very angry and in great distress. 

Species Known At End: Human and Vultull

Vultulls are cool. 

Species Known In Past: Human

I like it when people give their characters a species other than human. 

Species Known In Future: Human and Vultull

Cool, coolcoolcool. 

Gender: Female

Like most characters. 

Gender At Birth: Female

I don't know what to say here. 

Gender In Future: Female

Stays female I see. 

Sexuality: Pansexual

Why not date anyone? 

Sexuality In Past: Heterosexual

I started hetero as well. 

Sexuality In Future: Pansexual

Stays Pan, I see. 

Appearance At Start: A large amount of incredibly curly orange hair tied up into a ponytail. Pale-tan skin with a large number of freckles. Rather tall and skinny, but still reasonably curvy and strong. Bright intelligent green eyes.

I need her hair, and maybe her eyes too. 

Appearance During: A large amount of incredibly curly orange hair loose and resting on her shoulders and back. Pale-tan skin with a large number of freckles. Rather tall and skinny, but still reasonably curvy and strong. Bright intelligent green eyes.

Changes nothing but her hair. 

Appearance At End: A large amount of incredibly curly orange hair tied into a ponytail and tied several times down her hair. Pale-tan skin with a large number of freckles. Rather tall and skinny, but still reasonably curvy and strong. Bright intelligent green eyes.

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Appearance In Past: A small amount of incredibly curly orange hair tied into a ponytail. Pale-tan skin with a large number of freckles. Rather tall and skinny, but still reasonably curvy and strong. Bright intelligent green eyes.

So less hair than now. 

Appearance In Future: A large amount of incredibly curly orange hair tied into a bun high on her head. Pale-tan skin with a large number of freckles. Rather tall and skinny, but still reasonably curvy and strong. Bright intelligent and warm motherly green eyes.

Oh, motherly eyes you see. And I like her hair. 

Casual At Start: White t-shirt. Black jeans with ripped knees. Oversized cream jumper with silver and golden stars stitched onto it. Orange leggings under her jeans showing through the ripped knees. Red sneakers. A red duffle bag slung around her shoulders.

I like oversized clothing as well. 

Casual During: White t-shirt. Black jeans with ripped knees. Oversized cream jumper with silver, golden and red stars stitched onto it. Orange leggings under her jeans showing through the ripped knees. Red sneakers. A red duffle bag slung around her shoulders.

She added more stars to her jumper! 

Casual At End: White t-shirt. Black jeans with ripped knees. Oversized cream jumper with silver, golden, red and black stars stitched onto it. Orange leggings under her jeans showing through the ripped knees. Red sneakers. A red duffle bag slung around her shoulders.

And more stars!

Casual In Past: White t-shirt. Black jeans with ripped knees. Oversized cream jumper. Orange leggings under her jeans showing through the ripped knees. Red sneakers. A red duffle bag slung around her shoulders.

So no stars until story. 

Casual In Future: White t-shirt. Black jeans with ripped knees. Oversized cream jumper with all the colours of the rainbows, silver and golden stars stitched onto it. Orange leggings under her jeans showing through the ripped knees. Red sneakers. A red duffle bag slung around her shoulders.

All the colours! 

Amour At Start: A flowy white armour with orange details.

So like a BoM outfit but white and orange? 

Amour During: A flowy white armour with orange details.

Yeah, like a BoM outfit but in different colours. 

Amour At End: A flowy white armour with orange details.

Doesn't change her armour I see. 

Amour In Past: None.

Like most people sadly we do not have armour in real life. 

Amour In Future: A flowy white armour with orange details.

I like her armour. 

Formal At Start: A long red dress with golden flames at the base, sleeve bases and around the neck.

I think red and gold would suit her orange hair. 

Formal During: A long red dress with golden stars at the base, sleeve bases and around the neck.

Oh, stars instead of flames! 

Formal At End: A long red dress with golden feathers at the base, sleeve bases and around the neck.

Feathers! I love feather patterns and feathers!

Formal In Past: A long red dress with golden edges at the base, sleeve bases and around the neck.

So just edges instead of patterns? 

Formal In Future: A long red dress with golden flames, stars and feathers at the base, sleeve bases and around the neck.

Oh, all the patterns! 

Sleep At Start: A pair of black sweatpants. An orange t-shirt. Oversized cream jumper with silver and golden stars stitched onto it.

Sounds comfy, does she ever take that jumper off? 

Sleep During: A pair of black sweatpants. An orange t-shirt. Oversized cream jumper with silver, golden and red stars stitched onto it.

So same jumper as casual. 

Sleep At End: A pair of black sweatpants. An orange t-shirt. Oversized cream jumper with silver, golden, red and black stars stitched onto it.

More stars. 

Sleep In Past: A pair of black sweatpants. An orange t-shirt. Oversized cream jumper.

I really want that jumper. 

Sleep In Future: A pair of black sweatpants. An orange t-shirt. Oversized cream jumper with all the colours of the rainbows, silver and golden stars stitched onto it.

Is the jumper knitted? Because it seems knitted in my mind. 

Engineer Clothing At Start: An oil-stained white t-shirt. An oil-stained pair of black jeans. Red sneakers.

So oil-stained versions of her causal w/out jumper? 

Engineer Clothing During: An oil-stained white t-shirt. An oil-stained pair of black jeans. Red sneakers.

Same as above. 

Engineer Clothing At End: An oil-stained white t-shirt. An oil-stained pair of black jeans. Red sneakers.

No difference between them. 

Engineer Clothing In Past: An oil-stained white t-shirt. An oil-stained pair of black jeans. Red sneakers.

So she is an engineer? 

Engineer Clothing In Future: An oil-stained white t-shirt. An oil-stained pair of black jeans. Red sneakers.

Yeah, probably an engineer. 

Personality At Start: Happy but has trust issues, kind but has fears of abandonment, gifted but is definitely not a morning person, loyal but has a few issues.

How did she get her trust issues? Poor thing. 

Personality During: Happy but has trust issues, kind but has fears of abandonment, gifted but is definitely not a morning person, loyal but has a few issues.

Trust me, sweetie, nobody is a morning person. But morning person. 

Personality At End: Happy but has trust issues, kind but has fears of abandonment, gifted but is definitely not a morning person, loyal but has a few issues.

So her personality doesn't change? 

Personality In Past: Happy but has trust issues, kind but has fears of abandonment, gifted but is definitely not a morning person, loyal but has a few issues.

Make sure her personality changes over the story. 

Personality In Future: Happy but has trust issues, kind but has fears of abandonment, gifted but is definitely not a morning person, loyal but has a few issues.

Good balance of good and bad traits, maybe add some neutral traits. 

Mother: Rebecca McClain (Dixon). Half Vultull, half human. Pale skin with lots of freckles. Tall and muscular. Ginger hair. Green eyes.

Did she get her looks and her alienness from her mother? 

Father: Kayden McClain. Human. Medium-tan skin. Tall and lanky. Brown hair. Brown eyes.

Kayden is a nice name. So is Rebecca. 

Sisters:
Tess: Human, partially Vultull. Pale-medium with a few freckles. Tall and muscular. Brown hair. Brown eyes.
Jodie: Human, partially Vultull. Pale-tan with a few freckles. Tall and lanky. Brown hair. Brown eyes.

So her sisters look more like her father than her mother? 

Brothers:
Finli: Human, partially Vultull. Pale-tan with lots of freckles. Tall and muscular. Bright orange slightly curly hair. One brown eye, one green eye.

Finli, nice name. Are they twins they seem very similar. 

Aunts:
Megan McClain: Human. Medium-tan. Tall and muscular. Brown hair. Brown eyes.

Cool, coolcoolcool. 

Uncles:
Tyler McClain: Human. Medium-dark. Tall and skinny. Brown hair. Blue eyes.

He seems familiar. 

Cousins:
Lance: Human. Medium skin. Tall and skinny. Brown hair. Blue eyes.
Marco: Human. Medium-tan. Tall and skinny. Brown hair. Brown eyes.
Luis: Human. Medium-dark. Tall and muscular. Brown hair. Blue eyes.
Veronica: Human. Medium skin. Tall and muscular. Brown hair. Brown eyes.

She is Lance's cousin? Cool, coolcoolcool. 

Dating:
Keith Kogane: Human-Galra. Light skin. Black hair. Blue-grey-purple eyes.

So a KeithxOC story? 

Married:
Keith Kogane: Human-Galra. Light skin. Black hair. Blue-grey-purple eyes.

So yeah, a KeithxOC story. 

Friends:
FINLI - Fancy Illustrated Non-Living Intelligence- Looks like Finli.
Pidge
Hunk
Lance
Allura
Keith
Shiro
Coran
Romelle
Krolia

An AI! That is awesome! 

Enemies:
Lotor
Zarkon

Like anyone in the Voltron universe. 

Children:

Rachel. Human-Galra-Vultull. Pale-tan skin. Black hair. Green eyes. 

Five-eighths alien child. 

Likes: Sunrises, sunsets, caves, her friends, engineering.

Engineers and mechanics are cool. 

Dislikes: Her enemies, abandonment, secrets, being called a monster.

I'm guessing she is called a monster because of her Vultull heritage? 

Fears: Abandonment, loss, birds.

Birds? That is the best fear for someone like her! 

Favourite Foods: Any kind of candy, sweets or fruit.

So a sweet over a salty person? 

Least Favourite Foods: Space goo.

That is not going to go well when most of the food they have is space goo. 

Favourite Animal: Comic wolves, space caterpillars.

Yay! Kosmos! 

Least Favourite Animal: Birds or bird-like creatures.

Well, she has a fear of birds after all. 

Pets: Kosmos.

I need a Kosmos. 

Other: Has an allergy to feathers. Gifted, like mythology, was kicked out of home at the age of ten after her parents and siblings died in a car crash, lived in a cave for six years, trained at the Galaxy Garrison for four years, worked at the GG for six years.

Oh cool, I like mythology too. 

Writing Appearances: Apricots.

Coming soon to a WattPad near you! 

Original or OC: OC.

OCs are cool. 

What world are they from: Voltron.

Voltron is coolcoolcool. 

Melee Weapon At Start: A spanner she keeps on her at all times.

Attack of the wild spanner! 

Melee Weapon During: A technically advanced spanner she keeps on her at all times.

So she added tech to a spanner? 

Melee Weapon At End: An even more technically advanced spanner she keeps on her at all times.

And more tech? 

Melee Weapon In Past: A screwdriver she found on the street.

Oh, goddesses. That is probably not safe to use an old rusty screwdriver as a weapon. 

Melee Weapon In Future: An super technically advanced spanner she keeps on her at all times.

I wonder what this spanner can do! 

Hand To Hand At Start: Being quick with lots of dodging to tire out her opponent.

So a fast little one. 

Hand To Hand During: Being a bit less quick with lots of dodging and a few more punches.

Being stronger as she goes! 

Hand To Hand At End: Being quick with lots of dodging and punching.

Leaning how to be quick and punch! 

Hand To Hand In Past: Running away as fast as possible.

Sometimes cowards are stronger. 

Hand To Hand In Future: Exaughting out her opponent then knocking the opponent.

A nice technique! 

Long Range At Start: Small pistol.

Cool, coolcoolcool. 

Long Range During: A small pistol with tech.

She loves her tech. 

Long Range At End: A small pistol that can take out electronics.

That's a cool idea when the aliens have tech! 

Long Range In Past: Rocks.

Rocks. Huh, meh. 

Long Range In Future: A small pistol with all kinds of advanced tech.

She loves her tech. 

Short Range At Start: A handful of long strong wires held together with a rubber band making a sort of whip.

Cool idea for a weapon! 

Short Range During: A handful of long strong wires held together with a rubber band and curring a current through it making a sort of electrified whip.

That is a cool idea for a weapon. 

Short Range At End: Electrified whip.

Ever cooler idea! 

Short Range In Past: Nothing.

That's oaky. 

Short Range In Future: Electrified whip with all kinds of nifty gadgets. 

I love nifty gadgets! 

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So this character is very good, but it does still need a little bit of work. So I would give you an 84/100! 

What you need to do for this to get a hundred is improve the personality by making it change through the story. 

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