Hello. Crimson_Graves here to review your book. Please note this is based off the first three chapters. I am not a professional reviewer. I am doing this based on my knowledge alone. Feel free to ignore any advice :D

Cover: 9/10

I love this cover. It's beautiful and well made. The tile is easy to read and the image on the cover catches my attention. The only trouble I have is that it is a little hard to read the sentence at the top and your username a bit. Other than that, I love it so much.

Summary: 9/10

I like your summary. It does a great job summarizing the main point of the story. I think you've successfully placed that hook in the text to make readers interested to read this book. Great job!

Title: 10/10

I like your title. After reading your summary, I feel like it fits the plot of your story perfectly! It's attention grabbing and not a title that blends into the background.

Grammar/Spelling: 7/10

Overall, the grammar and such was well presented. I didn't find too many mistakes. I just have a few things to go over and take this with a grain of salt because I am not a professional.

One thing I noticed was the use of passive voice. I'm sure you know what passive is but just in case I'll elaborate for those in the audience.

The active voice describes a sentence where the subject performs the action stated by the verb. It follows a clear subject + verb + object construct that's easy to read. ... With passive voice, the subject is acted upon by the verb.

So two examples

Passive

Sam was eating five donuts.

Active

Sam devoured five donuts.

While both sentences are correct, the active one tells you a bit more about what is going on and makes the sentence flow a bit better.

I'm not saying you can't use passive. Passive works in many situations, but using too much of it can slow the flow down, so if it's possible, try to make the verb active.

Another I noticed, which I pointed out, was the sentences starting with I. Trust me when I say I do this ALL THE TIME so I'm not trying to be hypocritical lol. Just vary the sentence structure some to make it sound less repetitive. It will help with the overall flow.

Other than that, I notice a few comma errors and such, but it's nothing major. I really felt like the story flowed extremely well.

Plot: 8/10

While I have seen similar plots, I think you do a great job with it. Your book reminds me of a book I read back in high school — The Eternal Ones by Kirsten Miller. You should totally check it out if you get time! But I really like your book so far!

For those in the audience, I'll give a quick overview.

Two strangers fates are tied together life after life, but it always ends the same— death on her birthday at 18. Luke always tries to find Regan, but always finds her when it's too late. He get fragments of his past lives shown to him to help him find her.

Will this time be different?

Yes I suck at summaries— throws smoke down and disappears.

Characters: 9/10

I really like your characters. They each seem to have their own personalities and feel like real people. Regan and Luke fates are tied together for some unknown reason and unless Luke swoops in to save the day, Regan will die.

Charlie and Alexis also feel real. Charlie cracks me up with her driving skills. "I'm a good driver." Surrrre.

The only thing I can suggest is maybe adding just a bit more to their descriptions. I may have totally overlooked it, but I don't remember too much being said about their appearances. Again, if I missed it sorry and that's on me!

Overall: 9/10

I genuinely enjoyed this book. Like I said, it reminds me of that book I read in high school. I'll be adding this to my library and will be back when I have more time.

The characters are great, plot is hooking, and your writing is well done.

Great job!