Unreachable
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Unreachable By bluewhitesky166
Reviewed by Crowillow
First Impressions
The cover of your book is beautiful in the simple yet elegant way, writer. I can feel emotions of the solemness from the feathers and the clear blue sky. The only fault I find is the title is a bit blurred and I cannot see it is written by you.
Titles is lovely in a sad way though it also perks my interest because right away I want to know what is unreachable.
I loved how you made your description in the form of a poem. A poem speaking of tragedy, bitterness, and forlorn love without truly giving anything of your plot away.
Your Story's Plot and Structure
I like the plot you have created because it fits so well into the Naruto universe even sliding nicely into cannon. Your grammar was decent, your descriptions wonderful, and the only thing I found off was how rushed in certain places it seemed to be.
While I felt it was short in the chapters you posted, I thought it fit like a charm with the plot and the type of story you were writing. Line breaks would have helped a bit in the story as well.
Final verdict on your story
While your story is not something I would read as I rarely read maleXmale stories, I can tell once you twink things here in and there, you'll become even more popular than me!
Cheers mate!
-Crow
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