Before I begin the interview, I want everyone to know I'm not a bully and that anything I criticize is not to offend or hurt the author. We are only trying to help. I hope you enjoy and learn from this review and please remember you asked us to do this.

Redemption In Your Eyes By AsterUchiha

Reviewed by Crowillow

First Impressions

The cover of your book is nice in the way of the drawings but it's also dark, crowded, and bunched together in certain points where I don't even see part of the lettering or the cover itself. I think maybe you should consider redrawing it or finding a cover shop that will help you.

The title of your book is cool and it makes me wonder what type of redemption is the oc trying to seek.

I feel as if your description could use a little bit more work as it is bunched together and feels as if you're reading off a list. The grammar of it could be fixed a little bit here and there.

Your Story's Plot and Structure

The plot is interesting, to say the least, and I think it's cool twisting the plot where Sasuke and Itachi are not ya know intent on killing each other. I think some of your grammar could use a little more work and the same could be said with line breaks. The description is alright but I think you could describe the people, places, and emotions a tad better.

Another thing is the Naruto universe is surrounded by Asian culture most of the Chinese and Japanese. So I'm concerned and confused to why Aster name is English. An example I would give would be if a girl named Emily fell into the Naruto world they would translate and pronounce her name as Emi.

Final verdict on your story

Your story is cool and interesting! I can tell right away it will gain many readers, well more readers once you adjust somethings around.

Cheers mate!

-Crow