Mayonaka
Before I begin the interview, I want everyone to know I'm not a bully and that anything I criticize is not to offend or hurt the author. We are only trying to help. I hope you enjoy and learn from this review and please remember you asked us to do this.
Mayonaka By ANBU_Black_Ops
Reviewed by Crowillow
First Impressions
The cover of your book is nice and the colors are lovely, however, part of the picture is a little blurry.
The title of your book is interesting and it captured my eye.
I feel as if your description is captivating though you need to work a little bit more on grammar. I like how you describe how different we are going to find the Naruto world.
Your Story's Plot and Structure
The plot is interesting and I like how twisted and dark it is. I can tell you worked hard on redoing a lot of personalities and skills.
I think some of your plot was rushed and a little bit confusing at times. The chapters were written nicely and not short at all which is a good thing because readers love long chapters. Grammar is overall decent with only a few hiccups here and there. Details are alright but could work a little more on it.
Line-breaks need to be used a little better.
Final verdict on your story
I enjoyed reading what you've written so far and I plan to most likely read more of it in the future. It is an interesting book.
Cheers mate!
-Crow
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