Book Name: Before Noon

Written by: squirrelg

Genre: Science Fiction

Judged by: the_witt

Cover:

Fire in the city, ashes floating on the breeze? And pretty girl? What isn't to like about this? I mean wow all the elements of the story right out there in front of us! I like the way you've put your name in the two lines as a symbolism? Not sure but this is a really well thought out cover.

.9/1.00

Title:

The Title itself is interesting as got me intrigued... Until I see the (Saturday Updates) portion. For me I like this in the description. However, I do see the merit if you are trying to get the story out there. Quite a few people like the idea of a serialized story and at the outset when they see it will be updated on Sat., right in the title, they would be more willing to read it in stead of one that has not been updated in 5 months, if ever. Lets get back to the main title. What about noon? Why is it important? These were in my mind when I first saw it. Being in Sci-Fi category, had me thinking bout all the different things that cold happen.

.9/1.00

Description:

I really like this description. A lot! Aside from the "Ground Hog Day"-ness , of the premise, I love the idea that maybe, through perseverance she can win in the end. This combined with the cover made me want to add to my reading list.

.9/1.00

Beginning:

This story has all the needed parts. I read through quite a few sections to verify that it keeps its drive. The grammar is spot on ! The characters are so engrossing! I feel her pain in the beginnings of the book, and it makes me want to read, and read, and read! The structure is so good and each event builds to each new event perfectly. Great job! You have made this come alive in my head! And will most assuredly be added to me recommendation list!

1.9/2.0

Your Total Score: 4.6 out of 5