Judge: luciferspinkwings

Contestant: StarHues

Title: Moon Child

Genre: Poetry

Score: 3.79/5

Review:

First of all, I really like the cover of this story. The combination of the title, cover, and description is quite powerful and fits well with the poems inside, so great job on that!

It's a collection of very beautiful and diverse poems to read, I have found it quite enjoyable to try and find the different meanings of the poems. The sentences flowed naturally and it was consistent with the character of the poems. The poet managed to convey the feelings well and to evoke emotions in the reader. In other words, the reader is guided towards certain emotions rather than told how to feel.

The choice of words is, for a lack of a better term, simple. It lacks some substance which otherwise would have lifted it above the expectations. While not necessarily a bad thing, I would recommend the author to use a greater diversity of words - it would still be understood by your audience who will undoubtedly also appreciate the fresh language. I noticed a few punctuation errors, but nothing a good editor won't be able to help you with! (or you could get Grammarly, it's free, don't worry)

Greetings,

luciferspinkwings