Book name: Tom and Andrew and the Closet.

Written by: CarrieGChandler

Genre: LGBTQ+

Judged by: Jash_Parikh

Hey, @CarrieGChandler ! Let's start your review in a specific order...

Cover: Nothing much except the name, could be much more creative if you tried. I'm all for not judging a book by the cover but not everyone does that. Besides, for some people the amount of efforts you put on a cover also shows your dedication towards the book. If you are an up and coming author and are struggling for reads, a good cover can be a great crowd puller. For this you get 0.15/1.

Title: Two guys and a closet. Cheesy, cliche and mundane. Not all bad, though. Gives a naughty smut kind of vibe, would certainly pull the interested crowd towards you. But definitely could be much better. For this you get 0.25/1.

Description: I take it "The Towers" are a family whose neighbors are Tom and Andrew. But the description is so confusing from there on. You say Tom and Andrew are neighbors to The Towers, makes one feel they live together. Then the last line says they come together after an encounter. Who are you talking about? Who has an encounter with whom? Tom and Andrew with each other? Or one or both of them with The Towers? The description needs major rework as it only mentions things that the title already says as well as confuses even more. Then you have tags of so many awards. It's good you participated in so many awards, but placing tags here makes your description less importance. And first and foremost what are tags even doing in an area that clearly tells you it is exclusively for "Story Description"? I get that some awards want people to add tags, but adding them here is fruitless as they aren't even considered as tags by Wattpad. I'm sorry but this is an agonizingly poor description to read from a judge's perspective. From a readers's perspective, yes I just might choose reading your work. These are just my thoughts and opinions. Whether you wish to work on what I said is totally upto you, and remember I'm just judging your book, not you! For up this book if I was interested in the mere idea of an LGBT+ book, but you should add some uniqueness about what one can expect inside so that people are actually pulled into it. For this you get 0.05/1.

Beginning: I like the characteristic description of Tom. However, I'd like to have a physical one too. Except for the fact that he looks attractive, some facial features or body size/height or something along those lines would be very helpful. Nevertheless, I liked your opening. Your style of writing is matured and the sentence formation is decent. The word flow is also decent. I specifically love your event-descriptive writing style. The grammar is precise and the narration is on point. What you could improve on, like I said is the character description. Describe your character in such fine detail that I can visualize the person and all his actions. The idiomatic meaning of 'in the closet' becomes clear now. So does the plot. The plot isn't cliche at all, in fact it's pretty unique. Many of your lines are too cheesy, but with the kind of book you have Id say this was coming! The flow of the plot is good and well paced as well. Nice work here. What could use some improvement is that you could maybe add some humor in it. I don't see space for rollicking seat-gripping turn of events that could leave you gasping for more. However, I can see this book has a potential to become a complete entertainment package with some humor. A well written book with a well though-of plot and a side twist of humor? Who wouldn't like that? It could be a fun book to read for all kinds of people of all age groups. For this you get 1.85/2.

Your total score is: 2.3/5. (When you score 1.85 for the book, you generally are a front runner to win. But with this score you know you aren't for now. You have the potential, if only you try harder and come back next time I think you could be the one to beat for the other contestants! Good luck! :)

THIS BOOK HAS BEEN JUDGED MODERATELY, NEITHER TOO HARSHLY NOR TOO LENIENTLY. FOR ANY QUESTIONS OR QUERIES FREE TO PM ME.