Title: Son of Oceanus: Land of Melee

Author: Shazam531

Genre: action/adventure

Judge: xAnnaJoyx

Beginning ~ 3/5

The summary was difficult to understand, with irrelevant details. The prologue was better, setting up the story with some mystery and suspense.

Details ~ 3/5

The reader could get a sense of what was happening most of the time, but the scenes and most appearances were roughly left to the imagination.

Character Development ~ 3/5

The main character's personality was inconsistent. His reactions and thinking continuously changed without any reasoning behind them.

Grammar ~ 3/5

The sentences were choppy and there were a few of them that needed to be broken up. Also, capitalization errors were scattered throughout and the point of view changed from third person to first several times in the middle of chapters.

Plot~ 2/5

Not much happened, and the story didn't move. Some of the chapters had information that didn't affect the story at all, and the same problems appeared with no solutions.

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Total: 2.8/5