Book: The Twist by OLUWRACHEAL

Judge: Megan

For: Mystic Awards 2018

The book cover is simple yet eye-catching at the same time. Though, I'm not sure as to how it relates to the book, (from the chapters I read that is.)The title for the book is nice - the font pretty, but - the title has been used so it comes across as fairly unoriginal.The synopsis would come across as interesting if it was laid out with less amounts of errors (grammatical - etc, discuss that later.)

The pace of the book was mild - though, the amount of POV swaps made the speed quicken majorly, making it harder to keep up to date with.The plot is there - though not too strong, with the above mentioned swaps, it sways us readers away from what is happening. You seem to be sticking with it, but maybe more detailed chapters will help with this.That brings me to the layout, it our story is incredibly bare of details of locations, things that are happening, colours - things like that. If you add these in it will help brings your book alive. This will help your book become less speech inclined too. I cannot say I am hooked from reeding the chapters in which I did. There are seemingly interesting events that happen - but without the detail, it doesn't really work.This can be easily sorted of course, with a little editing.

There are a few too many grammatical errors throughout this book, which can be a major problem for understanding your writing. As a keen grammar-Nazi, I like to read books more so without the errors as I find it easier to read, as will many others follow my like.Your technique is thorough, I can make out what is and is not speech, a key aspect to your writing. As I mentioned before about the POV swaps, your delivery style is not the best as you include too many 'persons'. (First, second, third.)Transitions are complicated here. You repeated one chapter - in another's POV, this can be done, but more so with better definitions on the difference. We don't want to read the same thing again, but in a different persons eyes unless something interesting happens.

Your creativity would be amazing! - if only it was sold better. From your synopsis I knew your plot and what you planned, but sadly it doesn't show off your creativity. I love the idea of royalty and supernatural powers, but you haven't quite mastered them well enough in what I read.There was some cliche moments, like the fact that two twins are separated and need to find each over - they have power, etc, which is fine of course. Some love cliche stories. Others prefer more original content, but for your story I think it works.

All characters seem to lack descriptions and personality. I see you have a cast list, but we want to read how they look too. I think if you attune your plot and character descriptions/personalities, as well as grammar, you will be on your way to an amazing book.Also, remember: you do not always need to use bold to make things stand out, italics can help with certain points - if you're wanting a word to be more forceful. As well, please tone down on the lyrics used, a lot of people just skip over these.I do think people will see your great creativity better if you just amend these little things.