Book: Jade Warrior Saga by Alexander_Chase

Judge: Sammy

For: Mystic Awards 2018

The book cover, when I first see it, I get temple run vibes. Just the Ancient Greek and Roman feels you get makes you irk for adventure. It is a beautiful book cover. The title on the other hand also sounds adventurous, but also very boring at the same time. The description brings back some interest, but all sense of adventure is gone, and on with the demons and angels, which more suits the chosen genre than the previous two things.

The plot so far where the chapters stopped kinda matches up with what was summarized, but the pace of the story is a tad bit fast. The events are just going way too quickly for the reader to enjoy the story, and the chapters are too short, with little information. The story is pretty interesting, but with how fast it's going, it's bound to eventually bore your reader. I recommend expanding your knowledge on words and vocabulary, and read the trending books out in your preferred genre to learn how to spice up your writing. And the editing overall is averagely good, but there is a lot of elbow room for improvement, trust me.

Their grammar is the best I've read so far, as it is well written out. I can tell that they read over their own story often. Your style of writing again can use some work and practice, as you don't want a great story idea to be dragged about because of inexperience, or even lack of vocabulary and literary devices where necessary. In one of your chapters, as I've realized has been happening very often so far, is that somewhere you forget to place quotations on your dialogues, which is very necessary. And once again, your setting can't flow well in the story if the pace is too quick for it to catch up on.

It is a very creative story, as archangels are a common topic to write about, but to have it in their point of view is something even more extraordinary. And with that ability to do that, the writer keeps the story a little cliché as well.

The characters aren't the best part of the book at all, which is bad in a story. Because of the fast pace in the story, the book is being dragged along, making the characters not have any connection to the reader. They are, to me, just average teenage characters, just one is an archangel, and the rest, for the most, are humans. And that doesn't really seem as special as the story line itself. And that truly needs to change.