Book: A New Beginning by bachoo101

Judge: Nams

For: Mystic Awards 2018

The cover needs improvement, too much of texts as if different quote image were clubbed together to make a collage. It can be improved way better, can be minimalist or aesthetic to make it attractive. Title is good. Synopsis is to the point, explains the story but seems plain. Could be made interesting.

The story is a good attempt. The pace is slow for a moderate reader. And element of being hooked to story lacks to some extent. The story needs to have some suspense / thriller / cliff hanger at each chapter when the readers moves in to the next. Author needs to work on that part. Editing seems fine, there is a lot of room for improvement in terms of pacing of the story and the elements to keep the readers attention on track.

Author has a good command over the language. But there are lot of minor grammatical errors that needs a fix. The story delivery - in terms of sentences, paragraphs etc needs little polish. At the moment story feels like it's a daily routine recital. Needs to work on the narrative.

It's a unique story. Not being a die hard Harry Potter fan, I was lost in most of the references and setting used. But the story is no ordinary. The author has done her research and knows the HP world quite well to build the story around it.

As I said the story is slow paced, so it worked as a good base for character development. Author gives the reader an extensive view into the characters everyday life. Main and Side characters are all give good space in the story so far.

"A New Beginning" was a nice read. I enjoyed Harry Potter recurrences even though I forgot most of them. It was a good refreshment on my memory. I liked the way author brought in new characters and weaved her story into the HP setting. It's great how the author is so familiar with the background to keep the momentum of her story going on. The pace of the story could be improved as I felt it was slow from the first chapter. And the author needs to work on the narrative. It's quite simple at the moment. Can be improved to make it sound better in terms of delivery. Apart from minor grammatical errors, the Author has a good command over the language. Overall, I liked the story. It has a potential of turning it into an exciting read. All the best to the author!