Author: @JaylaEversole

So I'll be completely honest with you here because I really want to help people and sugarcoating just doesn't do that.

Cover, Title and Blurb:

Your cover is okay. Not great or perfect or eye catching but okay. I looked at the chapter where there were other options but none of them seemed to suit your book. Your title is not exactly eye catching either. If i saw this book, chances are that I probably will not immediately want to read it. However, your blurb makes up for that. It instantly caught my attention. It's not to short not to long and manages to catch and hold the readers attention. So great job on writting an AMAZING summary!

Grammar: 

There is barely anything to say about this. Aside from small mistakes here and there, your book is almost perfect in this regard. Honestly, the mistakes aren't even noticable. It was only because I was looking for them that I saw them.

So once again, good job on having almost perfect grammar, punctuation etc! There are not many books that can have this said of them. Especially on sites like Wattpad, where a lot of the time people don't really focus on this sort of stuff. It really bothers me when people have obvious spelling and grammar mistakes strewn all over their books. So I was really happy reading yours.

Flow:

It's great! The story flows smoothly. It's going at just the right pace and I really have nothing else to say here. 

(Honestly, your book has such few flaws that I'm struggling to find some! So don't think that just because I'm only praising your book that I haven't read it. I've been through your story word for word and I'm telling you it's great! I can't find anything negative to say about it ☺)

Characters: 

Although the book only has a five chapters so far, I've immediately taken a liking to Avery. (Maybe it's partially the name! I've always liked the name Avery, it's sounds so pretty 😉) The boys to are great. Austin and his rude, grumpy sort of attitude. Carter and his somewhat more understanding, voice of reason type of approach. Even the "shy boy" whose name i do want to know!

It's to early on in the story to be able to critique on how well you've developed your characters, but I will say that so far you're doing a good job! I'll probably add to this review later once you've updated a little more and I have more to go on.

Other Thoughts:

I really love how you keep bringing up what happened to Avery at the party without really revealing exactly what went down. It's the perfect way to keep the reader's attention and get them to keep reading.

Also, not revealing much about the "shy boy" keeps him shrouded in mystery. This is great as the reader wants to know more about him and so keeps reading. But most importantly, the characters must find out which one of them is the murderer and keeping the "shy boy" as a mysterious figure, immediately intrigues the readers and causes them to be suspicious about him.

And most importantly can I just say OMG!!!! Your plot is FANTASTIC!!  It is definetly different from anything I've ever read. Most stories today are so cliche. But yours is amazingly different and that makes it super interesting! 

Advice:

My main advice to everyone who asks is that you should re-read your story. Rereading once or twice a month helps a lot in finding your mistakes, editing and adding as well as making sure that the story is still flowing smoothly.

I would also say that it would be a good idea to order a custom made cover if you want. One that is a little more eye catching.

There is not any other advice that I can give you because you dont need any! 

I do though recommend joining a book club as it is a great way to get publicity and feedback, something a awesome book like yours definetly deserves.

A book club that I'm a member of is "CARTA" by @ccreationz. It's an awesome club and I really recommend you checking it out.

Overall, you write really well and your plot is amazing! I'm so glad I read it. I will hundred percent continue reading so please update soon!!! 

I recommend everyone to read this book, I promise it'll be worth your time!!

I hope this helped a little. (Not that you need help!). You are doing a great job! 

Goodluck with your book!👍❤                                                                                                  -Rose