Authors: @Niranju98 and @archana95

I'd like to start of by saying thank you for your patience! I know I was supposed to have done this earlier on but I honestly barely have had any time. With that said, I loved reading your book! You've guys have done a great job with it! So without further ado, here's your review.😊

Cover, Title and Blurb: 

The cover is easily the most striking part of the intial impression of the book. I especially love the vibrant green colour because it immediately catches a person's attention which is exactly what you want. The title is great as well. Although it's a little long, it fits your story perfectly. The blurb is long too. However, it doesn't really give any unnecessary information that I could recommend you to cut down. I will say that the one sentence summary that you wrote for an award was really good. I kind of liked it more than the original. Then again it's just my personal opinion and if you don't want to change the blurb, it's totally fine. It's great either way. Basically I think you've done a amazing job with the overall first impression of the book!👍

Grammar:

You have a few grammar mistakes here and there but nothing major. My advice would be to just go over the chapters once. If you like I can go over your story again and point out the mistakes. Also some of your sentences and dialogues are really basic and sound a little cheesy. Maybe you could touch them up? Otherwise, like I said you don't have any major issues in this section. Also, if you don't mind my asking, is English your first language?

Flow:

I really like how you've paced the story. You haven't rushed anything and you've gradually intoduced Illusia to both Cathy and the reader. I really dont have anything to say here, youve done that good a job! Not many stories flow perfectly and yours is really good!👍❤

Characters:

Rose is my favourite!!! There I said it. And no... not because of her name😉. Seriously though, I love her vibrant, bubbly personality! She's just so talkative and fun! Great job with her character!

Cathy and Jim are my next favourites. I really like how you haven't rushed their relationship and how you've kind of only implied it. The readers are free to draw their own conclusion.

Sam and the rest of the Tremendous Ten are amazing too. Their characters are each unique and well developed. Great job in this section!❤

Other Thoughts:

I love your plot! Although there are many stories out there about similar things like alternate worlds and academies for special types of people, I found yours fresh, new and interesting. 

I also really liked how rather than just giving information about this world in a bland way, you have a history class. That makes it so much more realistic! Also how Cathy researched stuff in the library. Honestly I can't praise you enough for this! ❤❤👍

Great job at world building as well. It's very realistic!

I only have one suggestion. When Cathy meets John and Alice and learns about Illusia, she easily goes with them. That's not very realistic. I mean I get that she's curious but she should still hesitate before venturing into an unknown world with two strangers! Maybe you can edit that part a little.

Lastly, I love the many plot twists you have! Especially the one about who Cathy's parents are and who her sponsor is (I won't give spoilers☺). Also it's great that you have multiple point of views. I really enjoy everytime the possible villain's pov is given as it really adds to the mystery and creates a suspenseful atmosphere. It also always happens before something bad occurs so great job with the sense of foreboding you create!👍

Advice:

There is absolutely no advice I can give you other than to go over the story and edit out some minor mistakes. You are already doing it all! You've joined a lot of awards and have asked for a lot of reviews and that's fantastic! Congrats on nearly 300 votes! That reminds me, I really love how you interact with the readers at the end of each chapter!

I definitely recommend this book to anyone reading this! It's an amazing book so do give it a try!

@Niranju98 and @archana95 I wish you guys all the best with your book which I will definitely continue reading!❤ -Rose