Author: @Kay_Ro 

I'm going to start of saying exactly what I say in each review, I'm going to be completely honest with you. This is only so that you know both your flaws and good points. That's the only way that one can improve as a writer.

Cover,Title and Blurb:

All three....are amazing! Great job! I love the vibrant colour of the cover as well as the picture itself. It instantly catches one's attention and also links well with the actual plot. So many books just have random covers that don't have anything to do with the plot itself. The title is brief and to the point, which I really like. It kind of sums up the main plot of the story and that's great. Also, I have yet to come across a book with a similar name. The blurb is again not too long but not too brief either. It really catches the readers attention with the promise of a unique and interesting plot.

Grammar:

You have no problems with sentence structure or punctuation. However, there are multiple spelling mistakes throughout the book which, though not to noticable, still manage to disrupt the flow of the story. Another mistake that I found in this book was that sometimes you tend to miss a word or write it wrongly. For example in one place you wrote "was" instead of "were". The simplest thing to fix these mistakes is to just read over your story carefully once and edit it.

Flow:

The story flows less smoothly due to the errors pointed out above. Also, although your story began at just the right pace, after the first ten chapters or so it really began to lag. The chapters were full of dialogues which (especially the ones between Zander and Ava) seemed to be almost exactly the same as the previous ones. The same banter, the same talking about the suitors. Their conversations always seem to mirror each other. It really got very tedious and boring. The best thing to do about this is to go over your story and cut out or change anything that seems to be a repetition of a previous chapter. 

Characters:

I really liked all your characters! Each of them was unique and different. I also liked how all the names of the characters are so different and ones you don't always find!

The sibling relationship between Zander and Ava is pretty great too.

One of my most favourite parts is the way you use the forms to introduce the suitors to the readers and Zander and Ava. That's a great way in giving a lot of information on characters without seemingly unloading it all at once. So great job on that!❤👏

You've also done an amazing job in introducing a sense of mysteriousness through characters like Liam and Icarus! It's a great way to get readers to keep reading. I'm super excited to find out more about them myself!

Another great part is that you let the reader see multiple povs. That really helps the reader to get more involved in the story and understand it better.

Other Thoughts:

The plot is super interesting and unique. I really enjoyed that aspect about it! However, adding a few more descriptions would go a long way in enhancing the overall charm of the story. That's one of the things I really recommend you to do. I noticed a lot of readers mentioned this in the comments as well. You really do need more descriptions to let the readers get a better feel of the story.

Another issue i found is that your chapters are very very short. That's why your story has gone on for over 60 chapters. Personally I would rather read medium sized 20 to 30 chapter books than really short 60 chapter books. Small chapters also tend to break the flow of a story which is not the best thing. However, I know how hard it is to write really long chapters. If you only want to write short ones, it's no problem provided the endings are practically cliffhangers. That's the only way to keep the readers wanting to read on. Most of your chapters don't end that way. For example your newest chapter end with Genevieve saying "fine, fine" and walking away. Now that's not really going to make a reader particularly want to continue reading.

Lastly there are a lot of unrealistic parts in your story. Ava's freedom is shocking! Its hard to believe any parent would allow their daughter to be like that. Also, I feel like Olivia's death was kind of swept under the carpet and could have been made a little more moving.

Advice:

I suggest re-reading your book once before continuing to update. That way you can easily find out all your mistakes as well as edit out any unnecessary repetition. 

I also recommend joining a book club as it really helps with getting feedback.

Overall, despite these small errors, I really did enjoy your book. It is a fantastic concept and I can't wait to read on! I really recommend this book to everyone.

Goodluck with everything -Rose❤