This is where the book went from mediocre to utter shit.

I thought the author could have fixed it in chapter seven...

But they didn't.

It got worse.

I've  been getting high on chocolate just to make this easier for me to talk about.

This chapter and review of the chapter contains themes of sexual abuse. Please skip it if you are uncomfortable with such things.

Oh boy, here we go.

Okay, we're in Mason's POV.

Mason shouldn't have interrupted and persisted rudely so...

Master Please...
This is Sexual Assault!

Not sexual assault yet, but Mason shouldn't be meddling in Angel's business like that.

As you can see, Angel is clearly disturbed by Mason's behaviour.

Mason...

Why was Mason made like this?

Not every dominant in BDSM is a creepy pervert who participates in illegal activity like Mason.

Mason could have been a likeable character.

I'll go more into what Mason could have been at the end of the chapter and, at the end of this review, there will be how I would improve the story from this chapter, how I would rewrite the story and how I would fix the people and make them characters.

God... This is just...

Also Mason is condoning stalking and harassment by saying "One don't back surprised I'm very protected over things that are mine. Two baby it's fate that you can't get rid of me."

First

"One, don't be surprised. I'm very protective of things that are mine. Two, baby, it's fate that you can't get rid of me."

Boom, fixed your grammar.

Second

Master Please...
This is Sexual Assault!

Yeah, Mason shouldn't be condoning harassment or stalking like that.

Mason shouldn't have grabbed Angel like that.

Master Please...
This is Sexual Assault!

He shouldn't be touching or grabbing Angel, especially when Angel doesn't want him to.

Also, the grammar is utterly terrible in this chapter.

They were just trying to speed it up to the sexual assault quicker, most likely.

DID I SAY SEXUAL ASSAULT? I MEANT SMEXY ASS MAKE OUT-

No, it's sexual assault.

This is literally the chapter that destroys the book.

This is the chapter that destroys any plot consistency there was. There was very little, but there is so much wasted potential.

Two ways of fixing this story is by either getting rid of chapter six completely or changing how the story goes after chapter six.

God, please end my suffering.

Angel rightfully slapped Mason.

Angel cannot be faulted for slapping Mason when Mason was harassing and stalking him.

Mason is HARRASSING and STALKING Angel.

Mason shouldn't have grabbed Angel back or dragged him somewhere.

Master Please...
This is Sexual Assault!

Mason locked the door and kept it locked after Angel demanded for it to be opened.

Master Please...
This is Sexual Assault!

Do I even need to explain why this is so very, very wrong?

*sharp inhale*

Now Mason is just flat out assaulting Angel by grabbing him and forcing him onto the couch like that.

Master Please...
This is Sexual Assault!

Master Please...
This is Sexual Assault!

This is sexual assault.

This is actual sexual assault.

MASON IS SEXUALLY ASSAULTING ANGEL.

Master Please...
This is Sexual Assault!

And it's still going!

It's still going!

Mason also gave Angel a fucking hickey to 'claim' Angel.

Jesus fucking Christ.

MASON SHOULDN'T TEASE ANGEL AFTER SEXUALLY ASSAULTING HIM.

Master Please...
This is Sexual Assault!

Chapter six did not go kind of good.

IT WENT KIND OF BLOODY TERRIBLE.

This chapter makes me so mad.

The author seems to think that this is perfectly acceptable.

The author thinks Mason is a character and a good one at that.

But he's not.

He's not even a character because his behaviours are inconsistent and he lacks anything that makes a character, let alone a good character.

Listen, this could have been a good chapter.

The story could have gotten better.

But it didn't.

It got worse from here.

If the seventh chapter went a certain direction, then this would have been a good chapter.

But chapter seven went terrible.

If you want Mason to be a character and a likable character, then you should make him consistent. Make him have quirks.

A main character that consistently harasses, stalks and sexually assault someone does not count as a character. The person is consistent with those actions, but not with behaviours and personality traits that make a character.

If you want Mason to be a good character, let me tell you how.

We know he's smart, since he made his own business from the ground up.

Mason is intelligent and has good looks, so that should naturally make him a persuasive person.

If you show us Mason being more persuasive than being forceful, then it would make sense that Angel would eventually fall for him. It would also make for an interesting plot.

It would be more interesting to see Mason use words and persuasion to win Angel over, instead of being a creepy pervert that's extremely forceful.

We also see Mason be pretty lazy when he's not working.

Play that up a bit - imagine the comical possibilities.

More than what Sheila did.

Imagine the jokes that could be made if Angel lived with Mason, after being convinced to live with him.

Imagine how good the story would be if Mason was persuasive, a bit relatable by being lazy, smart and didn't just claim Angel on the spot.

It would be a far better story then... then this shit.