*Review not edited, watch out for typos.

December Tryst

A story of love, courage and finding passion in life.

Opening comments:

Hi author! Sorry if this took too long to make; I'm a very busy person hehe. But anyway! I'd first like to congratulate you for making this masterpiece and many others! I totally did love it, and I hope it isn't as underrated!

Also a little disclaimer, this may not be my best review since I'm not very keen on reviewing romance.

Don't feel shy to add inline comments if you have any inquiries, reactions or pm me if you have anything you can't understand in my review.

First Impressions:

The quality of the cover looks good, it's clear that the person who made it put great thought into it. Though, the color pallette isn't something I usually see on young adult fiction. The cover looks like a children's book at first glance, I suppose it's because of the vibrant greens in the background and the font. Though once you look closer, you'll see it is well crafted, it just doesn't look like it belongs in young adult.

I suggest changing the font into a more mature tone. The background and color pallette, though it holds a lot of symbolism, may be changed into something that's more suitable for your genre. In my opinion, light green pastels rather than vibrant ones suit better.

For the title, I think it is perfect. From the very moment I saw your title in your form, I was already intrigued. It holds a great feel to it. The word 'December' gives the readers a sense of joy or relief or a cool breeze. By this word we already know or at least have an idea of what to expect. And then the word 'Tryst' gives just enough interest to the reader to make them click on your book. I think you did a great job on the title.

I also heard from a friend, 'Tryst' apparently means: a private romantic rendezvous between lovers. This was absolutely beautiful! I loved the fact that you put so much thought into this title. Great job!

The description is also good. But I've noticed something in the first paragraph.

The second sentence is way too long, and doesn't have commas or breaks. I suggest changing 'ay' into a comma instead. 'Kaya sa katulad ni Anniza na nakukulangan ng pagmamahal mula sa sariling pamilya, napakahirap sa kanyang paniwalaan ang salitang pag-ibig.' I shortened the sentence by simplifying it. I will get to this more on the 'writing' part of the review.

But more than that, I feel something lacking in the description. There was no conflict or plot introduced, and I feel that it is lacking in structure.

A description has to provide: character, conflict, stakes, structure in two hundred (200) words or less. The first part is the introduction, a basic view of your world and your characters. Though be careful not to overuse too much words or add unnecessary details. After it comes the conflict along with the goal, the thing that your characters are pushing through to get. And then the stakes, what will happen if they don't achieve the goal?

This works best on more action-centric or fantasy books, though it also works great on romance.

But, after I have finished your book until the last update, I realize it doesn't really have any conflict given at the beginning. The plot only really starts at the middle, to be honest. So I suggest giving your character a vibe instead. (I'll get more into the lack of conflict in the plot section of this review.) Give your description a feel of what your book is going to be, a lighthearted, comfortable feel for example. Yet all while presenting the story (Anniza getting tied into the three dates).

Take note of the things I highlighted. I circled your first paragraph, this is the introduction. I personally think you could simplify that second sentence better, as I have said earlier.

To the next paragraph, there's an arrow and 'ngunit.' I feel that it would be necessary for the steady flow of words. Also implying that this may be the conflict/inciting incident.

I also encircled the 'kasunduan' part. Your description is way too vague, too vague in fact that it didn't come off as intriguing. What is the 'kasunduan?' What will happen if she didn't take part, or failed to take part (stakes)?

'Ngunit masyadong naging malikot ang tadhana,' how? 'May mga pangyayare.' I know that descriptions have to be vague and shouldn't spoil the plot, but being too vague may actually pull your readers away. Oftentimes I come across vague descriptions like this (as a reader, not a reviewer) and it just doesn't intrigue me as much.

You have to tell your readers what to expect, be the right amount of vague.

Also, I suggest removing 'ang mga iyon,' since it isn't needed to complete the sentence. '...hindi kailanman naisip na posible' is shorter and still conveys the same context.

Just remember to add the inciting incident in there, a brief glimpse of your plot. But remember to not give away too much detail as well.

I suggest stating what the 'kasunduan' is and what Anniza fears will happen if she wins or she loses. (Talking about the 'may mga mangayayare' part.) Would there be consequences? Does she not want to be in a relationship yet? What are her beliefs?

And now to your opening chapter. I like that your epigraph started with a Bible verse, it really holds a lot of symbolism especially for the plot twist. I normally don't like books that have dialogues as its first line, but this one is great. For real.

The sudden 'boom,' of the very relatable parent's voice itself already set the scene, honestly. Not to mention that you are absolutely amazing at writing dialogues, too. The scene, though it started with dialogue, already hooked me in.

The dad's ranting on the kitchen table, the children's silence and the mom, it set just the right amount of tension and ability to relate with the main character. I also love that Kuya Anton is caring and an all in all likeable character. It especially brought tears to my eyes when he and Anniza talked in the car and he patted her head because she was scared. Now that's a character I'd root for.

Characterization:

First off, If it isn't obvious in the last comments earlier, I love Anton's character. He's a man of passion and dreams who cares for his little sibling. He knows what he wants and strives to achieve it. Though he can be a little overbearing when it comes to getting what he wants and achieving his dreams, it is totally understandable since his own parents doesn't support his passion. At the first parts of the book, I hoped that he has a character arc that will make him realise his limits.

As for our main character Anniza, I think she is a pretty likeable character. Though there's nothing much to her that stuck with me as much as her brother did. She is painfully relatable though, especially the 'not knowing what I want to do' part.

She also doesn't have clear goals or dreams, hopes or beliefs. Though I get that that may be the point, the stark contrast between her and her brother. And the thing she needs to develop on as a character. A development where she learns to be brave and know what she wants in life.

I suppose that that would be the theme of the story: finding courage and purpose. And I suppose Eilam would be the one helping her.

Though...I feel that their interactions at the first parts were way too scarce. It wasn't enough to build romantic tension, there was barely a dynamic between the two, and it seems Eilam only has 'being a gentleman' as a personality.

Eilam is a free man, someone who's parents probably supports his passion and grew into a loving household. He's here to bring change and courage within Anniza. He'll be the reason for Anniza's character development, as she'd finally have something she wants to fight for, or something she has passion for.

I feel this isn't too bad, it's a pretty thought out development. Though, I would be even more grateful for it if Eilam had more of a personality.

And regarding to your private message about Eilam being barely noticeable in the story, I'd have to agree with the person who said this. He seems more like a plot device for Anniza's development rather than a character of his own.

Also, onto the topic of gentlemen, I feel Eilam was lacking in personality, as his only one is being a gentleman. He's an 'ideal man,' opens doors for the girl, gives chairs to the girl, walks girl to places. It's pretty robotic, forced. It doesn't seem as authentic or shocking or memorable.

You don't only have to give the readers all of Eilam's good points to make them fall for the main lead. You'd have to give him more personality. A fleshed out character with likes and dislikes, preferences, opinions, goals and outlook on life.

He doesn't have much interesting things to him that could make the readers intrigued. Though he did shock people in his confession, albeit it can come off as creepy especially without the knowledge of the plot twist.

I suggest keeping in mind that the reader only knows and sees what you as the author wants them to see. They do not know that Eilam is a reincarnated Elias, nor do they know the significance of his confession.

And regarding your question (if you should make a scene for Eilam), I think this would be for the best. Adding more Eilam scenes may help him have more opportunities to charm the readers.

I suggest adding more scenes of Eilam and Anniza together, or having Anniza observe Eilam in a more detailed way, what her opinions are and how Eilam talks to other people. Enhancing their dynamic within converstaions is also a great way to establish chemistry.

Though, I admit after-the-first-date Eilam is way better, I really hoped you conveyed his character better in the first chapters and on his introduction. After the first date, I personally think he has gone better, probably because the time is right now so he doesn't seem too much of a creep.

You are a great writer, and when I visited your profile, I could tell your genre of writing is romance. I know you could introduce Eilam in a better light than this.

Also, a little disclaimer, I clearly disagreed to review any romance-centric books (though it may have been mostly my fault for getting too excited and accepting all the forms), which is why I am not a romance-critic and this review probably sucks the worms out of netherworld. I do not know how to write or review romance.

So please do not take any of this advice (on romance) as professional, this is simply my opinion as a reader and maybe a bit as a writer.

And well, I'd just like to say that Anniza and Eilam did not have a dynamic. I've been to a couple lot of fandoms, and had obviously shipped characters together.

And most of the characters I've shipped, and most of the characters on some romance books I loved, I analysed them. I analyse them to find out what exactly makes them click. And I found it: chemistry.

Most of the time, it is given in parallels within the world, in contrasts, and mostly in comedic moments. Their compatibility lies within their ability to have fun, laugh and feel comfortable together.

In this case, however, them being a couple only showed irony or parallels at the later parts of the book. As I have said earlier, the reader does not know they are soul mates in the first parts of the book. They could not root for them if that was the only thing keeping them tied as a couple in the first meeting.

And then I observed Anniza and Eilam together. I found they just don't seem to click immediately like all those other fictional relationships.

As i read your book, I update the review as well, I complete it little by little as I go along your book. And honestly I don't know why but I can't see chemistry within the first meeting of the main pair.

I suppose it's because of the lack of screentime on the first chapters, before-first-date scenes. Their introduction with each other wasn't very great.

I suggest making it feel more to the readers, more emotional or more comedic, either of those two. I've also observed that funnier couples click better than boring couples.

You could make their first meeting ethereal, or mysterious, heart wrenching, nostalgic or fluffy. Or you could make it funny, comedic or downright second hand embarassment grandeur. This would make them seem more interesting, create a dynamic, and have chemistry.

The best way to introduce the main pair to each other is through comedy, as much as I have observed. Most romance couples, shows or books started out quite funny or bizarre.

In adding comedic effects, you could try going with comedy tropes, breaking tropes or many others. I'm not that well versed in comedy either, and not to mention that comedy is subjective. The best tip I can give here is to write with your own kind of humor. If you don't find the humor you put in your book funny, then how will others laugh at it?

Anyway, I really think it got better after the first date.

I suggest making a very detailed fan analysis of your main characters. In this analysis, state the main arc and development of your character. And do it just as how a fan does it. Have you ever read a character analysis on a fictional character through blogs or forums or tumblr? Yes, those kinds of blogs.

I've always found them quite eye opening and could really help you step into the shoes of what your reader may feel like. Have a good grasp of your character as how a reader sees it, and then analyse what they lack in this one character development scene, or what else they need to improve.

Though, I need to praise you on the fact that you really bring out the best in each character whenever there was an emotional scene. Such as the rant, or Anton's breaking point when they were talking over the phone. You gave such raw emotions and beautifully crafted scenes to really bring out the best in your characters. I love that.

Conflict and plot:

The three date structure was brilliant. From the moment it was introduced, I instantly knew this would be the basis and structure of the plot.

In terms of plot, I don't really have much of an issue with. I loved that the plot twist was forshadowed enough that it wasn't outrageously shocking or expected.

Though, I must say, it was lacking in conflict and goal, and might make your readers drop the book before the plot twist. The latter parts of the book were great, they were exciting. But the middle parts were quite boring.

I suggest, as I have said earlier, to add more comedic effect and/or show better dynamics within the main pair right off the bat. With this, the readers would start rooting for the main pair, even without the conflict or the goal. It would make the boring middle parts more straight-to-the-heart and/or fluffy.

Some stories like Hotarubi No Mori E, for example, pull off such a beautiful story even without the active presence of both conflict and goal. The reason? The beautiful dynamic within the two main characters.

You could either improve the dynamic between the main pair (especially on their introduction), or add a bit of goal or conflict. For example, I have noticed that Anniza barely does anything to move the plot. Most of the time, it had been her brother Anton or Eilam moving the plot for her.

I've realized that she doesn't really do anything to improve herself either, there was no sense of will to know what she would want for life (as it was disclosed somewhere in the first chapters, she had no idea what she wanted).

And in my opinion, that was what made her a boring character in my mind. There was no fire within her. Sure, Eilam sparked character development within her, but that doesn't change the fact she didn't put in as much effort for herself.

Having to rely on others such as a lover for your own development is also a toxic development. Since even though you developed, you still couldn't stand up on your own.

So I suggest instilling a sense of curiosity, or will, or mystery. Especially those moments before she discovers the paintings of her grandmother in Eilam's place.

What if you add a subplot where she constantly wonders or is set on solving these things about her grandmother? What if you make her ask around and slowly start piecing the clues together?

What if you add a sense of will within her, some sense that will reguvinate her, only for her to be disappointed once she finds out Eilam would only be spitting reincarnation 'nonsense' at her.

This will make the scene more impacting for both the readers and Anniza, since I personally think she may have been a bit overreacting when she found out about the paintings.

But with the sense that this mystery of her grandmother and her locket that had made her want to want something, then ending up on a dead end with Eilam, it would make her feel betrayed, or hopeless. Hopeless that even if she wanted something, she still won't get to it in the end.

And then that's where Eilam can come in. These are just my suggestions, but I do think this subplot or arc may make Anniza's annoyance or frustration towards Eilams more valid.

Pacing:

Your pacing is fine. The chapters aren't very long, but they aren't so short either. You mentioned in your form that you would like me to focus on the pacing, and I think in regards to chapter length, it's good.

But when we're talking about the plot, that's where I might have some issues in. First off, the main premise itself is already setting us up for some ridiculously fast confessions. Though I don't really have a problem with that, as it does come off as mysterious and though quite creepy, it sets the plot going.

But Anniza's heart starts skipping a beat too soon.

Eilam has barely even entered her life yet, he simply confessed to her after not even having a proper conversation yet. Love at first sight? No matter how cheesy it sounds, most readers don't really believe in that either. It's simply insta-love.

But when he invites her and their friends over at his house and realizes they actually talked before, was it even significant?

The excessive staring, as I think about it, seems like lazy tension forcing. I didn't feel any romantic tension between them at all. Not to mention Eilam's lack of authenticity and personality plus presence.

There was barely any romantic buildup at all, and I don't quite feel connected to the male lead.

I found Anniza's 'kilig' moments quite annoying in that chapter. This creep is staring at you intensively, and that makes your heart go boom boom? I would have liked it better if Anniza had some interesting way of calling him out for the staring. Would she be polite? Would she snap at him? Would she notice at all? Though I think she simply ignored it and thought it felt good being stared at.

This may sound harsh but that's simply because if someone anyone has barely even talked to starts staring at you, no matter how pretty he may be, it's still quite creepy. And if I were her, I'd definitely ask if he needs to tell me something. Again, even though they are soulmates, you still have tk think what the reader's point of view is as they read your story.

This chapter is important, the moment she visits Eilam's place, it should have been powerful. But it was just clichéd. This was the moment she agreed to his three dates, which is also why I could not understand why in the description, she was described as 'nasangkot' into an agreement.

'Nasangkot' makes the reader think she was tied into the agreement, that she didn't want to do it at all. But in the story, she agreed. I suggest changing this word in the description.

My only issue with the pacing is how Anniza unrealistically starts liking or at least develops a crush on someone that fast. Makes me wonder if Eilam put gayuma (love curses) in those antiques of his.

I suggest toning down the staring, and also Lauren's teasing, it had been funny and relatable at first, but had become increasingly more annoying. The way I think of it, a simple converstaion with a lot of heart and dialogue would work better in this scene. Weren't they looking at antiques? This would be a great way to find out their dynamic.

Would they be funny alone in a room resulting in a couple hilarious moments? Would they be sentimental? How would one of them react to almost knocking over an antique? Or would they be awkward? Sometimes that scene can also be done well and shows dynamic while being relatable. I suggest experimenting with these scenes and asking questions on how the two characters may react that would bring dynamic to the two.

The way they react to each other as well. Establish their dynamic early in the story, this would make the readers root for both characters to be together. And Anniza's crush would be far more understandable that way.

Theme (moral lesson):

The moral lesson here is mainly about knowing what you want, the basic morals of a Young Adult book. Knowing what you want, and fighting for it.

I have no issue with that, I think it's a great moral lesson. It isn't awkwardly stated, which is a good thing.

All in all, I think it's great. And the main pair being soul mates is absolutely beautiful. I really loved how you portrayed Anniza and Eilam's relationship in the latter parts of the book. Especially chapter 28, that was a well done chapter in my opinion. So good job in the moral lesson!

Anniza's character development also starts appearing in chapter 29, I'm so glad! She finally has something to fight for, and knows what she wants, which is Eilam.

Writing:

I love your writing. It has been so long since I red a Wattpad book that is actually well written. Your grammar is fabulous, there's little to no incorrect spelling, and even though I see a couple typos here and there, it isn't too hard to correct.

I think your Filipino is decent, and doesn't add too much unnecessary TagLish, though it isn't unrealistically deep either. Great job on the writing.

Though, I may be Filipino, I write in the English language. I may have missed some parts in your grammar that needed to be addressed.

So in times like this, I ask a couple other writer friends for their opinion on some books I reviewed. In this instance, I asked a fellow Filipini writer about your writing.

This is what she said:

"And mas gugustuhin kong malaman yung main story like kung saan talaga topic and not basic info sa character...nakasabi kasi doon na hindi minahal ng parents ni ano siya bla bla...

"About nga pala sa decription..I just think na di right yung paggamit ng words? I just felt na it's not right and masyadong malalim...kung paano siya magsulat ng chapter sana gano'n rin description: simple yet intriguing."

--Regarding the description

"I think they need to make it straightforward at 'wag gawing detail-per-detail yung ginagawa ni MC.

"Ganyan rin kasi na-experience ko noong una akong nagsulat...kahit obvious na sinusulat ko pa rin...I think it's best kung mag stick siya sa iisang POV which is yung kay MC dahil nagmumukhang maraming POV ang ginagawa niya dahil sa details...nawawala tuloy concentration ko."

--Regarding the writing

Anyway, regarding my own critique, I just found a couple things that need addressing while reading your work. You tend to stretch your sentences too long, and it starts getting too wordy to read (insert Grammarly ad hehe).

Observe what I have scribbled on these screenshots. There have been many times where you could rewrite the sentences to make it flow easier rather than non stop words.

'Iniisip ko na baka may kulang kaya nakailang pasada ako sa sariling repleksyon mula ulo hanggang paa.' This sentence could be simplified to this. 'Nakailang pasada ako sa sariling repleksyon mula ulo hanggang paa, iniisip ko na baka may kulang.' I flipped the sentence and changed 'kaya' into a comma.

I can't seem to understand why, but 'nang' is making the storytelling seem more vague and blurry for me. It isn't a very good choice of word to paint a picture. And as I was reading your book, I realize you use 'nang' quite frequently.

'Nang,'...I'm not so sure it would fit well for describing.

I suggest removing the 'nang.' And instead describe how Anniza's face contorts to one of realization as she notices the lack of jewelry on her neck instead. This will help for better painting of the scene and description.

Also, notice the underlined statement there, 'na hinubad ko kagabi,' it is unnecessary information that puts another resistance to the flow of words. I suggest either dropping it or rewriting the sentence so you can find out how to inject that little detail.

Take notice of the second encircled 'kaya.' It is another word that lengthens your sentence and disturbs the flow. The realization (that the necklace is gone), the explanation (that she took it off yesterday night) and the action (that she retrieved the necklace from the sidetable) are all in one sentence.

These may all be rewritten if you remove the 'nang, kaya' and explanation. As for why I am suggesting to remove 'kaya,' it mixes the action with an already lengthy sentence, making it even more lengthy and thus less descriptive.

These are all unimportant information and lazily injected description to force the imagery in the reader's head. I laughed when I read this. '...pag-abot ng paper bag na nasa passenger seat na naglalaman ng macaroon na binili namin sa nadaanang coffee shop.'

To be honest it sounded like someone ranting. The word 'na' lengthens the sentence, and while normally it isn't as appalling, when overused it sounds ridiculous. Not to mention that these are seemingly unimportant information and just lazy attempts to explain a very, very minor plothole.

I'm sorry if this seems a bit harsh. Though I suggest either removing this, or adding an indication in the earlier scene that they plan to go to a coffee shop. But other than that there's nothing much you could do with this sentence. If you insist to explain the macaroon's sudden appearance, it will only sound desperate and might drag out the scene even more.

Now this is just a minor inconvenience like some of the stuff I've seen in your book. I suggest removing 'sa paghakbang,' as it is very distracting and unimportant. And then there we go with the 'nang' situation again. It drags out a sentence and lessens it's descriptive qualities.

And here I suggest moving 'ng maramdaman ang pag-vibrate niyon,' to the front of the previous sentence, if that makes sense. For example: 'Napa tigil ako ng nag-vibrate ang cellphone sa loob ng bulsa ko. Mabilis ko itong binunot at tinapat sa tainga habang patuloy kaming naglalakad,' it may not be your style of writing since I just used the above sentences as an explanation.

But by putting the action in chronological order, it wouldn't confuse your readers or lessen the descriptive impact of the scene.

But then notice the 'nang' yet again. It came right before the underlined sentence.

The main point? I suggest streamlining your sentences. All these examples I have given are screen shots from your own book. I wish to help you be more descriptive and less wordy in writing, and I finally remembered the right term. Streamlining. It is removing the 'duh' moments of your sentences, just like what I did with most of these examples.

For more information, I suggest reading: 'How To Write Stories People Will Love' by Zoe Blessing here on Wattpad. Visit the twentieth part of that book entitled 'Streamline Your Sentences.'

No, this is not paid promotion, nor do I have connections with the author. I simply suggested their amazing book, it has helped me through writing as well.

But other than that, your writing is beautiful. The emotional scenes were well crafted, and the writing just really helps all those emotions burst forth and affect the reader. I love how you write emotions, author. Spectacular job on that.

Formatting:

The formatting is fine. It's neat and isn't confusing, there's a foreword with the copyright claim, an epigraph and then the chapters. Though I usually prefer books with chapter names, it isn't really all that big of a deal.

Though I have one problem with time skips. You start the first word with all caps, and though I think that's fine, it seems pretty confusing when there isn't a divider at all. I prefer adding at least three asterisks (*) for every time skip or scene change and then the capital first word. This will make the reading smoother and won't startle your readers.

Dialogue:

You have insanely good dialogue skills! One thing that shocked me beyond comprehension (okay that might be a bit dramatic) was how great your dialogue is. It jumps right through the screen! You portrayed their (especially Lauren and Anton's) character's through their dialogue in such an amazing way. Lauren has an energetic, eccentric typical Filipino student voice. She's a goofball. And frankly, reminds me of most of my friends. And Anton has a very softspoken and kind tone to him.

Anniza, however, seems very typical and timid when she speaks, which really embodies her character. There's nothing much I can say here except great job.

Though here we are again with the Anniza thing. I think her dialogue isn't as interesting or has much of a personality in them. Her responses are painfully average.

I've found most of her responses are quite generic and doesn't invoke as much emotion.

'Hindi naman masyadong halata' sounds very much like a generic joke. This attempt at comedy also doesn't show as much dynamic.

Accuracy and originality:

In terms of originality, I've never really heard of a premise such as this, which means great job on that! Though the accuracy, not so much. Especially that moment when Anniza starts liking Eilam too fast in the story. Though the characters of Lauren and Anniza is relatable. I suppose that falls on the accuracy part as well.

Personal enjoyment:

Personally I found it quite boring on the first parts. Or maybe that just comes from my own preference, since I'd prefer action books than slice of life. Though, I must say your book was a breath of fresh air. The writing especially, is quite alluring and comfortable. It isn't over the top or dramatic, and it isn't cold or boring either. I found your narrative calming, and overall simpler to read and get by on the go. Exactly the kind of books Wattpad is made for.

Though I found the characters sort of flat, I did find myself rooting for their character development. This is mainly because I know you are a great and passionate writer, and I am highly doubtful you don't have a plan for character development.

Closing comments:

That is all for the review. I hope this helped you in any way at all and that you take this critique seriously yet not personally. All criticism are for your book's own good, and is not an attack on you as a person.

As a recap, here are my key points throughout the review:

1. Lighter, more YA tones for the cover.

2. Structure of a blurb.

3. Introduction of Eilam to the readers and the main pair's introduction to each other. Fleshing out his character, the moment before Anniza agreed to his three dates. (For more information, you could check out my Facebook Page: The Writer's Blackboard. I have posted several or at least one blog on creating characters there.)

4. The main characters' dynamic and chemistry as a couple. Comedic effects.

5. Plot.

6. Pacing.

7. Streamlining your sentences (for more information, check out Zoe Blessing's Wattpad book How to Write Stories People Will Love.)

8. Using asterisks (*) for time skips.

9. Widening Anniza's vocabulary and more interesting dialogue for this character. (Also goes hand in hand with fleshing out characters.)

WORD COUNT: 5400 words

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