Reviewer: BloodyTurtle

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Icarus Guild: The Renaissance Incident

By Mou-san

Reno has the top grades in his class. The problem is......that's all he has. He is pretty sure his teenage years are gonna go to waste. However things take an one eighty degree when knockoff beauty Elsa transfers to his class. What begins as a simple outing soon evolves into a bizarre adventure involving a hilariously mysterious organisation- Icarus Guild!

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Cover/Blurb/Title

Cover • I like the cover. The only thing I'd change is the fact I can't read "Icarus" but it's well made other than that.

Blurb • The blurb is basic and good because of it. Some commas are missing, but it's well written and flows nicely.

Title • I really like the title. So many on here have basic 1-2 word names, while this one is longer and great. It fits well, and it's original.

Descriptions

Some things are described well, such as the feelings of Reno and the technical stuff. The scenery and character design do need to be described more, though. It was a little hard to picture everything.

Characters

Your characters have strong personalities. I like Reno. He is a great main character. The character design needs to be explained more, but that's about it for complaints. I like your characters. Also, I enjoy that you have a male protagonist. Very few exist on Wattpad, which I've realized since I downloaded the app. 

Plot/General Writing

I like the storyline. It's creative and caught my interest. The sentences flow well, and I felt compelled to read on. The pacing was well, and it wasn't too fast or slow. 

Grammar

This does need work. The story was riddled with mistakes. Commas especially need work, but there are other small mistakes. I recommend you download Grammarly on a computer and use it to edit, as it'll fix a lot of the types of mistakes you have without the full service needing to be bought. I use Grammarly myself. 

Reader Engagement

I found myself greatly engaged while reading. It caught my eye, and I enjoyed it. I'm curious about Reno's situation. I liked the Icarus bit it used too, which is also a big appeal for me. 

Overall

4 stars out of 5

This story definitely has potential. It just needs to be more descriptive and the grammar needs to be checked over. Other than that, I'm impressed. I was engrossed in the story, and I found it well written. I recommend this to people who like light-hearted tales.

Good luck, lollipop!