Reviewer: BloodyTurtle

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Fatal Addiction

By @xxCancerbaby98xx

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Cover/Blurb/Title

Cover • The cover is nice. It's simplistic, but it works. I can read everything.

Blurb • The blurb wasn't anything spectacular. It barely gave interest, and it mostly hyped up one review it got. I recommend you add those facts after the blurb itself. Don't highlight good things about the book, as your blurb should spark the interest. But the blurb was too simplistic, and it needs a lot more to be especially interesting.

Title • The title isn't anything special, either. If you search it up, numerous books by the same or very similar title appear. I recommend you change it to one that isn't used.

Descriptions

The descriptions were very lacking. I barely could picture anything. I knew they performed actions, but I hardly knew the surroundings. I was made to guess surroundings most of the time. You gave the bare minimum if you did describe something. I wasn't even impressed by the smut, and that's usually well described in stories with it. I didn't receive descriptions, but was simply told something happened. It's not the same, and I couldn't picture anything. You use pictures as if they are all we need, but a book doesn't have pictures unless it's a magazine, a book based on actual events that has a few, or one that occasionally will have one for aesthetic purposes, not so we know what everything looks like. Please, don't have pictures. I don't even like when people do casting, as they should be able to describe well enough where we don't need to see pictures.

Characters

I didn't like the characters, to be frank. First, I couldn't picture them without the pictures given. I shouldn't need pictures. Second, I disliked their personalities. They didn't have too distinct of personalities. All of the females were similar, and all of the males were similar. I disliked how they spoke, as they didn't have any decency and seemed to choose to have dirty speech at every chance. The way they referred to lovers seemed terrible to me though they loved them based on the dialogue, and I disliked how they saw the world. Like the guy complaining about kids since they prevented him from having sex, or something terrible like that. That's a terrible thing to say. These characters just... I really didn't like them.

Plot/General Writing

The writing wasn't especially great. It flowed pretty well. The pacing somehow managed to be too fast and slow at the same time. Nothing really happened, but the characters did too much all at once. And the time skips that happened occasionally just made it a but confusing and made the story have certain pauses in the flow. The plot didn't interest me at all. The blurb made it seem okay, but I started and it was simply the characters living. It bored me greatly. It takes too long to get to what the blurb described. I just hated the wait, and it made me wish to drop the book swiftly. It just... Ugh. Sorry, but get to the point.

Grammar

The grammar wasn't too good. Yeah, better than most on Wattpad, but it wasn't good enough to gain interest. Plenty of mistakes were there, and I recommend you download grammarly to fix some of them. I understand that the way the characters spoke, though I disliked it, was purposeful and worked, but mistakes were in the other parts.

Reader Engagement

I wasn't engaged. Nothing caught my interest, and if any did in the beginning, it died swiftly when nothing interesting happened in the first few chapters. Sorry, but I could hardly keep reading.

Overall

This book has potential, but it needs a lot of work. I really couldn't get into it. I simply hated some aspects of it. That's not saying everyone will hate it, in fact, you seem to have plenty of fans. But I really didn't like it. I recommend this to anyone who likes stories that take their time.

1 star out of 5

Good luck, lollipop!