Author: SAANVI005

Reviewer: KaynatK01

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Amplify (Cover)

The cover of your story is good enough. As your story is school drama, I would prefer you should add some school stuff or if you could collect your leads picture in school uniform and make a cover of that.
That would be something interesting.

Accent (Title)

The title is common though!
I would suggest your previous title, *Will We Have A Happy Ending* was better than this one. The previous title suits your story very well then this current one.

Crescendo (Blurb)

First I would appreciate you for a good hold in vocabulary, but your blurb is quite confusing my dear.
I think you should have made it a little bit easier for your reader to understand. I won't mind using strong vocabulary but it wasn't needed much in the blurb. One more thing, kindly check your spelling of 'fell' it should be fell head over heels, in your blurb.

Hook (Prologue)

Your prologue was interesting. I liked the scene which you used in Prologue.

Ballad (Plot)

Your story is common though, and there is not much new stuff to make your story interesting. If you are writing something on school romance, it should be attractive from the starting, if not your readers will decrease. (And it feels bad to write stories and getting less response, isn't it?)
I would suggest you start putting MaNan scenes more, obviously, your story has just started but it's been 8 episodes and there isn't many MaNan good scenes except the sad ones. So buckle up in your 9th episode and make the story something fresh.

Ensemble (Characters)

Well No character sketch in the story?
Again the lacking point in your story there isn't well-made character sketches.
You are an ardent reader and you must have read a lot of stories and they must have put character sketch in their stories! And giving characters faces. Right? You haven't done either of the two, dear.
We are imagining Soha as a bad bitch here but we don't know her description, How she looks like? So better you give a character sketch of characters.

Avant Grad (Storyline)

The storyline is flat, Nothing is making the graph go higher.
Take my advice now also you can change your direction, The coming episodes can be a turning point of your story.
So go with some new fresh twist, involve MaNan friends (Like Dhruv and all) also in this story don't just keep them to give one dialogue in your whole chapter.

Cantabile (Grammar)

Your grammar is good but you do make mistakes that can be helped.
Make use of punctuation marks usually. And make dialogues be in bold or some other font to make it more attractive.

Dolce (Reviewer's opinion)

I would seriously suggest you dear stop using 'Fuck' word casually. We all use bad words but there's a limit, and you are using this word more often so try to lessen it!
And secondly, inform in the starting, when you add a point of view who's point of view the readers are reading. You just put (****) instead of writing Manik Pov so it would be easier to understand the point of view.

Third I understand despite being a common topic you have picked this topic to write. But as a writer you should put your own twist that would grab the reader's attention. Obviously your mind has lots of twists because if you can write this much, you can write better than this. That's it, the readers want that.

I am sorry if you felt offended by any means but all I Have kept my honest thoughts in front of you. So it would help your story be amazing❤

I hope my review was helpful to you, And am eagerly waiting for the turning point of your story 😍😘

Kaynat Khan,
Reviewer of FMC.

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