Author: mahaenterprises

Reviewed by: __ThelazyAatma

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Cover (Amplify)

The cover for your book is not appealing to my eyes. The cover is one of the important elements when it comes to judging a book. I would recommend you. to change the cover.

Accent (Title)

According to me, the title is common and not up to the mark. You need to put a bit of more effort. Though it's a good title but not so impressive.

Crescendo (Blurb)

I didn't get tempted to click the read button when I read your blurb. And I'm very disappointed after reading the blurb. Instead of a detailed character sketch of Nandini, it would have been better to see a short paragraph which would give a short detail about the story. So you need to improve in this area.

Prologue (Hook)

The blurb and prologue of the story are the same. You see, new things attract readers so I prefer to change and edit your prologue.

Ballad (plot)

Though the plot is common yet it's a nice one. Manik betrayed Nandini and she starts her new life with her little daughter. The the scenes are too clichè, which makes the plot unpleasing to the reader. You can make some amendments to the plot.

Ensemble (characters)

You need to work on your characters. I didn't understand their behavior sometimes, it was all juggled up. Try to figure out how to portray them.

Avant Grad (storyline)

The storyline was good but need improvement in the formation of lines and dialogues. Though the storyline is hooking but the story is going too fast forward. Slow down a bit and try to work on your plot holes.

Cantabile (Grammar)

The story needs a lot of improvement in the grammar part. As there were many errors in tenses and especially in punctuations ,which cannot be ignored. Keep the length of your sentences medium, don't continue them like a chain.

Dolce (Reviewer's Opinion)

You need to change your cover and blurb as soon as possible. And avoid using mobile (SMS) language. You need to improve your grammar.
And my personal opinion is don't lose hope and as a writer, you need to improve where you lack. Just pay more attention to the points mentioned above.
And don't worry about the errors that have been pointed out here because this is just the beginning.

Regards,
Shivangi

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