Author: yana_in_music_world

Reviewer: satchitanandini

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Amplify (Cover)

The cover is good. The light background in contrast to the dark dresses they're wearing is beautiful. Great job. Parth in Indian wear would've made it better.

Accent (Title)

The title was nothing new. It showed that it's going to be a love story. It was very common. Something new could've been tried.

Crescendo (Blurb)

The blurb could have been much better. It just explained the situation. You could've made it more hooking. It didn't garner my attention as a reader.

Hook (Prologue)

This was a major disappointment. There was no prologue. A few scenes from the story's future would've made it better.

Ballad (Plot)

The plot isn't anything new. It is like old wine in a new bottle. It was on the concept of a forced arranged marriage which has been commonly written. Though you've written that you won't make it cliché for the 9 chapters it was cliché.

Ensemble (Cast)

The names of the cast were different. Except for Parth and Niti as the lead, the others weren't repeated. Parth as Advaith, a frustrated businessman who doesn't share a good relationship with his father and Niti as Aarohi, the damsel in distress was like a repeated drill. Also, Aarohi wearing only Indian wear at home after being married and silently crying over her misery made it too mundane and monotonous.

Avant-Gard (Storyline)

The storyline as I said earlier is old wine in a new bottle. Love after marriage, love after hating isn't something new. It didn't pique my interest as a reader.

Cantabile (Grammar)

Grammar was okayish but certain words need reconstruction. See to it that names, dialogues and the word you use is capital. Do give English translation for Hindi also and maintain one language in dialogue. If you're using Hindi them let the entire dialogue be in Hindi except for a few words. Also, look into the punctuations like comma and semicolons.

Dolce (Reviewer's Opinion)

It's a nice story. Just see to it that you make your female protagonist strong and independent. I'm not against Indian wear but a girl changing immediately after marriage seems like the same drill. Do make the necessary changes and you're good to go.

I hope this review has helped you. Good luck!

Love,
Satchita Nandini.
(Reviewer, FMC)

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