Author : ChrissyPineCone

Reviewer : Simasye_Maulidi

• COVER : 7/10

I like the idea you had behind the cover, it's fun, airy and just gives you that drive! Like, I want to read this. Let me tell you something, a cover gives your readers an idea and I thought your main character was a female up until page 6 of the first chapter and I was like what? Andren Thompson is male OMG! See? Try using a different cover, that shows your readers what it's about.

• TITLE : 10/10

The title is great. It sets the mood, it's short and it's catchy. Great job on that.

• BLURB : 10/10

Oh! The moment I read the blurb my heart melted into butterflies, it's a very sweet story you've created, different, I mean polar opposites! I find it unique, even though it's cliche to some people, it's the journey that matters! Keep it up.

• CREATIVITY : 8/10

You've got such a great storyline but it lacked imagination. What I mean by this is that, yes you described the places and your characters well, but I really felt like I was just reading Andren's diary. More situated on his thoughts rather that interactions, feelings and dialogue. As you venture into your writing journey, dig deeper into those areas and your story will be even better!

• PLOT : 15/15

I love how your plot flowed smoothly, it was great for me. Keep up the good work.

• CHARACTERS : 7/10

Your characters are unique, my favourite is the famous Andren. He's everything I want to be right now! Aside from him, I love the unique names and how different they all are in terms of personality and presentation. Great work!

• GRAMMAR : 14/15

I found minimal problems with your grammar, a few punctuation errors that can be revised easily once you reread your chapters.

• COMMUNICATION : 5/5

Communication with your readers is great keep it up! Readers like to feel appreciated, so that little thanks for reading  means a lot to us.

• OVERALL IMPRESSION : 11/15

In addition to everything I just said above, you've got an amazing book, great storyline, cover needs to worked on but for now it will do. The grammar! Everything is on point.
However, I somewhat lost my drive to read because you were way focus on Andren's mind, I'd like to see more dialogue and learn more of what the people around him are like.
All the best in your writing! I hope I wasn't too harsh.

• TOTAL : 87/100

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