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Gift:GOLD

Book's Name: Eros Academy
Author's Name: u-know-me-now

(i)First Impressions: 14

Title – 5, Cover – 4, Blurb – 5

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 10

(iii)Character diversification and development: 10

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 10

(v)Overall Impression: 5

(vi) Total: 49/50

Review:

The title is very mysterious, but interesting as it makes me want to dig deeper to finding out how Nicole ''Nico'' Black will go to find out what new student Cythia Ella De Rose who is a secret spy, the lengths she will go to steal the royal crown.

Awesome cover! I love the imagery of the crown reflecting in its shadow and the blade coming down pointing directly on top the crown's diamond. The all black background suits the cover and looks good overall. However, the font style for ''It's a battle for the crown'' is unattractive and a sloppy form of cursive or calligraphy.

The blurb immediately appeals to the reader by talking how a teenage girl goes undercover in an all-boys school to steal the crown from Eros Academy. Already you have set up the plot for suspense wondering how this girl will navigate through this school for boys without revealing her disguise and of course stealing the precious royal crown of Lavianne Alexander. Set ups a theme of mystery and wondering how the girl will pull off this disguise.

The opening chapter has remarkably set the tone. Excellent job on using descriptive vocabulary to describe the fight. I can mentally see people around cheering and laughing. The plot is creative and am interested to find out why Cythia will keep this disguise up to get her greedy hands on the crown.

As a reader was really impressed by the depth of your writing. Overall, I love the twists and turns of the plot it kept me on the edge of my seat as I was reading.

The character of Nico is extremely dedicated to his family and job which comes across as heartwarming. The symmetry between Melli and Nico and their brother and sister relationship are so sweet and relatable. I love development of how each character's individual personality is a little cryptic in their own way. It is mysterious trying to find out why they really are deep down and what motives they have.

Very nicely written. The grammar stayed consistent and there were no errors.

I really enjoyed reading your story. The characters felt real and relatable.

Gift: SILVER

Book Name: Pain and Passion

Author's Name: Lmntrryx

(i)First Impressions: 14

Title - 05, Cover - 05, Blurb - 04

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 10

(iii)Character diversification and development: 10

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 8

(v)Overall Impression: 5

(vi) Total: 47/50

Review: As for the title, on first impression it tells a story of a couple falling in love and going through journey of pain and passion in their relationship. Your title also gave off a tragedy-romance vibe that created an air of intrigue around your story, making me wonder how each person deals with loving someone passionately and then having their heart ripped into thousand pieces.

Next for the cover the quality and font style are really excellent but the color scheme just black and white is too bland. Try adding a splash of color to brighten the background scheme of the couple. Overall, the cover is visually appealing and tells of a story a couple in love and going through the phases of love and heartbreak.

Lastly, I thought the overall blurb was good. The blurb was relatively too short but you nailed the point across of how couples fall in love and go through the wrenching stages of heartbreak.

The concept of your story is eloquently written beautifully! When being in a relationship one of the worst things you can do at the moment is to deny your feelings especially the pain of getting your heart broken. Each chapter flowed together nicely and the structure of events where various women detail their heartbreak as a reader, I could visually see myself in the story!

In the second chapter Back to You the opening paragraph was on fire! The vocabulary used to describe the way the woman mourned over a man who never cared about displayed the raw emotion of her letting her pain out while she played the piano. When our hearts get broken, we all use pain in a different way to cope with heartbreak and that is what the plot of this story told.

The descriptions surrounding the characters of the women falling in love and dealing with their agony really help connected to the story. As a reader I felt myself feeling each and every heartbreak alongside the women. However, we all deal with heartache differently I would have liked to see any of the characters deal with their anguish in getting revenge back on the men that hurt them. The characters felt very real and relatable.

Next for the grammar, throughout your chapters notice a few grammar mistakes and punctuation errors. Just a recommendation reviews your work to check for any grammar and vocabulary mistakes that will help you catch any mistakes.

Overall, superb job on writing this short story! Relationships are glass they're fragile and sometimes will break apart. I loved your opening chapter and the use of vocabulary and descriptive writing. Excellent job!

Gift: BRONZE

Book Name: MUSE

Author's Name: contessavc

(i)First Impressions: 13

Title - 05, Cover - 04, Blurb - 04

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 10

(iii)Character diversification and development: 10

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 7

(v)Overall Impression: 5

(vi) Total: 47/50

Review: As for the title, the word ''muse'' seems to compliment the book and cover. On first impression I imagined your title relating to the fallen angel constantly thinking about the people she encounters on earth. Your title also gave off a forbidden-romance or friendship vibe that created an air of mystery around your title.

Next for the cover the quality and font style are okay but try making the font bolder as it is a little hard to see. The background image of the statue of the male angel kissing the woman and holding her is beautiful and sweet.

Lastly, I thought the overall blurb was short it is apt in explaining the plot. Try adding more of your character's thoughts and feelings. This will help your readers connect with them before reading your story. Overall, the blurb was very eye-catching and unique.

The concept of your story is written beautifully! From the beginning of the first chapter and onward you written every scene with such prose, ease, and innocence. Each chapter was individually crafted and descriptive where I could visually see myself in the story! Way to go with the descriptive writing and showcasing the emotion in the characters especially the fallen angel and the boy.

The flow and structure of events from chapter to chapter flowed together very nicely. I must say I was shock to find that angel and boy couldn't date because of the rules the order had laid out. I wished you could have shown a relationship between the angel and boy especially in the third chapter when he cried out in pain for her to help me deal with his mother's death.

From the beginning when the angel sees the boy, I was intrigued to see how their relationship would develop. At first, I knew for sure their relationship would be a forbidden romance but it turned out to be heartbreaking. All the angel did for the boy from the moment she laid on eyes on him.

She sacrificed so much and she is left with the pain of the memories that she created with boy. I don't like how the angel defied the order and as her punishment the boy's memories of her was wiped away. That ending was something that I didn't see coming or expected.

As a reader I felt myself feeling the heartbreak alongside the angel especially the emotions she was feeling when she had to say goodbye to the boy.

As for the grammar let's start with your blurb. In the last sentence of your blurb was written in past tense and not grammatically correct. For example,

❞.. fire taints her body, while her broken bones are not mending.

Poor angel, how far you have fallen for a boy blinded by the silly world. ❝

The Order has been told - no angel may come in contact with humans. But alas, there's always someone who dares to test the boundaries.

Will the little angel falls (change to fall) from grace and burn? Or will she be saved by the very thing that's caused her to go against The Order? (change to or will the very thing that's caused her to go against The Order will save her? The original sentence is written in a passive tense using a passive verb. The new sentence is written in an active verb instead making the sentence much stronger.)

As for the rest of the story I didn't notice any spelling mistakes but there were some minor mistakes regarding use of tenses in the past and present tense. In writing make sure you stick to one particular tense otherwise your story could come across as confusing hopping from one tense to another. There were no punctuation errors.

Overall, as a reader I enjoyed reading your story! This story was touching and it flowed together beautifully. Superb job on writing this short story! From the start of the story to the very end I could feel what the angel was feeling. I am heartbroken that she is the only one that remembers while boy does not but has a sense of a déjà vu feeling of remembering what the angel did for him. Why doesn't he remember her healing and taking the pain he felt away? Why did she have to defy against the order?

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Author's Name: Rypool28

(i)First Impressions: 13

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 9

(iii)Character diversification and development: 9

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 9

(v)Overall Impression: 5

(vi) Total: 45/50

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(i)First Impressions: 12

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 10

(iii)Character diversification and development: 10

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 7

(v)Overall Impression: 4

(vi) Total: 43/50

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(i)First Impressions: 11

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 8

(iii)Character diversification and development: 9

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 9

(v)Overall Impression: 4

(vi) Total: 41/50

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(i)First Impressions: 13

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 7

(iii)Character diversification and development: 7

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 8

(v)Overall Impression: 5

(vi) Total: 40/50

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Author's Name: Mystic_Writer97

(i)First Impressions: 12

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 10

(iii)Character diversification and development: 9

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 6

(v)Overall Impression: 3

(vi) Total: 40/50

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(i)First Impressions: 12

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 6

(iii)Character diversification and development: 10

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 2

(v)Overall Impression: 5

(vi) Total: 35/50

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Author's Name: @Ririflower

(i)First Impressions: 10

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 5

(iii)Character diversification and development: 10

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 7

(v)Overall Impression: 3

(vi) Total: 35/50

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Author's Name: Charlieruuh

(i)First Impressions: 14

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 7

(iii)Character diversification and development: 8

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 1

(v)Overall Impression: 3

(vi) Total: 33/50

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Author's Name: akeila_agramunn

(i)First Impressions: 11

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 6

(iii)Character diversification and development: 6

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 6

(v)Overall Impression: 3

(vi) Total: 32/50

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(i)First Impressions: 11

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 6

(iii)Character diversification and development: 6

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 6

(v)Overall Impression: 2

(vi) Total: 31/50

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(i)First Impressions: 11

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 7

(iii)Character diversification and development: 2

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 8

(v)Overall Impression: 3

(vi) Total: 31/50

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(i)First Impressions: 11

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 4

(iii)Character diversification and development: 5

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 4

(v)Overall Impression: 5

(vi) Total: 29/50

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(i)First Impressions: 13

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 3

(iii)Character diversification and development: 6

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 2

(v)Overall Impression: 2

(vi) Total: 26/50

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(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 1

(iii)Character diversification and development: 3

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 1

(v)Overall Impression: 1

(vi) Total: 15/50

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(i)First Impressions: 11

(ii)Flow & Structure of Events(plot): 1

(iii)Character diversification and development: 1

(iv)Grammar & Vocabulary: 1

(v)Overall Impression: 1

(vi) Total: 15/50