By: eburneanteen (I'll link in comments, since wattpad eats my tags)

Package: Bramble

Your summary sets the tone with that little extract from your book, so I'm expecting there's going to be at least a touch of humor here and there, which is always good. It also sets the scene, despite being rather brief and we also get a clue as to who the characters are going to be. Personally, I think your summary is great, but you could always extend it a bit. ie, perhaps hint at why this soul is incapable of love - get us intrigued as to what happened... or maybe hint at a major problem they might encounter...

A good summary should introduce your character somewhat, tell us the situation and an issue, and maybe follow that up with a twist/cliffhanger of sorts. Using a cliffhanger is a good idea, or at least a powerful ending line that'll act as a hook (to basically ensure possible readers click on that little read button). I've tried to follow this format when crafting my summaries, but sometimes you might need to adjust minor things here and there.

Looking at your foreword and synopsis, I think, to be honest, the synopsis does a great job... not sure why you've put it inside the book rather than on the blurb, since I think that does a far better job of hooking readers, in my opinion at least. (PS, technically it's a blurb and not a synopsis, since a synopsis is a condensed version of the entire book which reveals what happens. It's usually around 200 words long and is used in querying an agent, I believe.)

Now... onto the prologue...

Your prologue does a great job of setting the scene, and although it seemed like it was going to be a slow start, it picked up towards the end. As far as I can tell your grammar is brilliant, so good job with that. The way your sentences flow nicely into one another makes for a nice read, which is a bonus for me. You've introduced some mystery... Why can't Eva go down to earth? What's making her father hesitant as to?

It also feels like you're foreshadowing the future, with what happened to Eva's mother.

I only noticed a small number of mistakes:

Such as 'in Earth' rather than 'on Earth' which would probably make more sense.

Just read over your work once more, and you should be fine, because quite frankly, your standard of grammar is great.

Your first chapter follows a similar standard, so you'll hear no complaints from me on that subject. There's a fair bit of humor in there when they meet, and it's well paced. Nothing's happening too fast or too slow. It's great characterisation for them both. Brice's reactions are relatable, so I instantly could connect to his character, as well as maybe laughing at him and his situation.

The chapter length is also suitable and doesn't drag on too much, so brownie points there too, though it is on the long side for me. I'm interested as to how the story will progress, and what else is in store for Brice and Eva, so keep up the good work.