kimberly_rash

Before I say anything about your book I want to remind you that these are just suggestions! I am by no means a professional:) I am sorry if I was a little harsh, it was not mean to hurt you in any way! okay let's get to it!

Book cover: 10/10 I love your cover, it portrays your story very nicely.

Grammar: 6/10 You had some mistakes and you switched between last and present tense sometimes but that's okay, everyone makes mistakes:)

Descriptions: 5/10 Your book could definitely use some descriptions such as what people look like(in Kate's pov) and what rooms look like.

Characters: 8/10 I love your characters but I have no idea what they look like.

Real life situation?: 8/10 This may happen in real life.

Cliche: 8/10 Your book is moving really fast so far.

Total: 44/60

Final review: Sometimes how you worded stuff sounded weird and almost didn't make sense(not to be rude, I don't know if your language is English!) it started out really fast which isn't a bad thing if you want to do a short story. There was a few times when you switched between first person and third person point of view. When you skip time you should start a new paragraph, not put it in the same. When you switched to Terrance's pov in chapter three, you should still put the dialogue and explain even though you already did that in Kate's pov. Overall I liked your book so far and would definitely recommend it!!

Just another reminder: THESE ARE JUST SUGGESTIONS, YOU DO NOT HAVE TO USE THEM!! IM NO PROFESSIONAL:)