Before I say anything about your book, I want to remind you that these are just suggestions! I am by no means a professional:) I am sorry if I was a little harsh, it was not mean to hurt you in any way! okay let's get to it!

WestboundAnchors

Cover: 10/10. I like your cover and the quote you put on it. It goes really well with the book.

Grammar: 8/10. I didn't see to many grammar mistakes.

Description: 6/10. You should add more of Jacks emotions in with your book. I go into more detail in the final review.

Characters: 7/10. I don't get to know much about the characters. You're good about putting their thoughts in but their emotions need to be put out their also!

Real life situation?: 5/10. Most likely can't happen in real life but that's okay it doesn't have too:)

Final review: I thought your book was headed in a great direction. I would recommend putting spaces in between your paragraphs; It makes the chapter look longer. Also, with it being all in one paragraph readers cannot comment until the end. The book started off kind of quickly which isn't a bad thing but sometimes readers want to know about the character and their environment before being thrown in head first:) also when Jacks mom died it should've been more dramatic. You should add the thoughts that are going through Jacks mind as he watched his mom die. something like: "I watched my beloved mother hit the floor. The women that has raised me up just got taken from me so quickly. This man has to die. I have to make him suffer for taking something so important from me. The bang from the gun still rings all around in my head. I can feel my heart beat in every part of my body." That wasn't that good but something along those lines:) When jack got shot we need to know his physical pain. Maybe something like: "I didn't know he had even shot me until I felt the wet blood running down my stomach. Then it hurt, real bad. I felt the stinging through my whole body." That also wasn't very good but it's just an example ahah. Jack may be a guy but he still has emotions. You should include how he is feeling about all of this. When you put certain phrases into parenthesis it confused me. I'm sure there's something behind it but it just confused me. I did enjoy reading your book through!

Just another reminder: THESE ARE JUST SUGGESTIONS, YOU DO NOT HAVE TO USE THEM!! IM NO PROFESSIONAL:)