Story: Reincarnation
Author: MoonLightGoddess1

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Reviewer: WisnolWeasley

ꗃ﹕❜Title: 6/10

﹕❜In my review of the story, I would like to emphasise the significance of a unique and captivating title along with an eye-catching cover. Titles and covers play a crucial role in capturing readers' attention and generating intrigue. While the chosen title is straightforward and to the point, I believe there is an opportunity to explore more distinctive options that align with the essence of the story. By selecting a title that is both unique and connected to the narrative, the writer can enhance the overall appeal and draw readers in even more effectively. I encourage the writer to consider this aspect as they continue to refine their work.

ꗃ﹕❜Cover: 6/10

﹕❜It is essential for a cover to align with the plot and conflict of the story rather than solely focusing on visual appeal. The chosen cover, featuring Taehyung alone in a dark setting, may potentially give readers a misleading impression about the genre and plot. A more fitting approach would have been to include both Taehyung and Y/n on the cover, providing a clearer representation of the story's characters and their dynamic. On a positive note, I must commend the writer for their subtitle and the font choice in the title. The subtitle effectively hints at the story's essence without revealing too much, adding intrigue for potential readers.

ꗃ﹕❜Blurb: 9/10

﹕❜ The blurb for the story was skillfully crafted, incorporating beautiful language and meaningful messages. It struck a balance between providing information about the story without giving away too much, leaving the reader eager to explore its contents. The use of emojis to separate paragraphs added a visually appealing touch without causing any disruption in the overall flow. The writer did an excellent job with the blurb, capturing the essence of the story while maintaining intrigue.

ꗃ﹕❜Grammar and Vocabulary: 10/20

﹕❜ I observed that this particular section of the story could benefit from more extensive and descriptive scenes, as it felt comparatively weaker compared to the rest. Generic readers often enjoy immersive and detailed depictions of the surroundings and atmosphere. The limited vocabulary in this section stood out as a blemish on an otherwise pristine book. Upon revisiting the book, I noticed minor issues with grammar and punctuation, which can still be addressed before reaching a point of no return. With some improvements, this book with its exceptional plot can become even more captivating and remarkable. I recommend a thorough review to identify areas of improvement and areas that excel.

ꗃ﹕❜The Conflict and The Plot: 16/20

﹕❜I found the plot of the story to be refreshingly unique and captivating, despite its seemingly simple nature. The plot twist at the end of the 'Ancient' section, where Taehyung decides to confess his love for Y/n, added an intriguing layer to the narrative. The concept of Re-Birth and Eternal Love explored in the story is truly enchanting. While the pacing of the book may have been a weak point, I believe the conflict of the story has driven it forward. I encourage the writer to build upon the theme and conflict while addressing the underlying flaws. There is great potential in this story, and I look forward to seeing it evolve.

ꗃ﹕❜Pacing: 4/10
﹕❜ While the concept of Reincarnated love in the story was intriguing, I agree that the pacing and grammar issues detracted from its overall impact. The series of events unfolded rapidly, even considering the story's fan fiction and short format. It would have been beneficial to delve deeper into the reasons why the main characters fell in love with each other within such a short span of time. I suggest the writer emphasise the qualities and experiences that forged their connection to make their love more believable and meaningful.

ꗃ﹕❜The Characters: 6/10

﹕❜I really enjoyed the dynamic between Taehyung and Y/n. If we exclude the part of them abruptly falling in love, their relationship after that point felt organic, having a giving nature for each other. I however can’t say the same about the side characters. Characters of any story are said to be well written if their actions in the present affect the story some other way in the future. Y/n’s and Taehyung’s friends felt completely irrelevant to the plot of the story as they didn’t add much value to it. Even if we remove them completely from the story the write up still remains unchanged.

Arbitrary Points:- These are some minor points of the story which I wanted to mention separately.

i. Rationality:- While the small section of the story set in the Ancient world was intriguing, I found that the language used by the characters and the setting they inhabited did not fully capture the essence of that time period. The dialogue and descriptions could have been more immersive and authentic to create a stronger sense of being in that historical setting. Enhancing the language and details related to the Ancient world would add depth and richness to the overall storytelling experience, allowing readers to truly feel transported to that specific time and place.

ii. Character Decisions:- While the characters in the story were generally well-developed, I noticed that there were instances where their decisions seemed inconsistent with their established personalities. These moments felt somewhat unrealistic and took away from the overall believability of the characters. It would be beneficial for the writer to ensure that the actions and choices of the characters align with their established traits and motivations, creating a more cohesive and authentic portrayal. This will enhance the readers' immersion in the story and strengthen the overall character development.

iii. Banners and Inline Pictures:- The pictures and banners used by the writer in the story from time to time really helps a reader to visualise the scene.

iv. Chapter:- Giving relevant names to each chapter can greatly enhance the appeal of the book to a wider audience. It adds an element of intrigue and anticipation, enticing readers to delve into each chapter with a sense of curiosity. By providing chapter titles that are thematically or conceptually connected to the content within, the writer can create a more engaging reading experience. This approach not only adds depth to the structure of the book but also allows readers to navigate through the story with a better understanding of the overarching themes and narrative progression.

Overall:
I want to express my gratitude for giving me the opportunity to review your book. Your passion for storytelling shines through its pages. While providing feedback, my intention is to help you elevate your writing to new heights. Remember, every great writer has faced challenges along their journey. Embrace the revisions as stepping stones towards your success. I firmly believe in your talent and can't wait to see your book thrive. Keep going and keep writing!

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