00 - I liked this introductory. It's a good way to start the book and a good way to figure out what you're reading. Nice to know the information given. - Rating: 5/5

01 ~ before - It was a pretty good chapter, a pretty nice beginning. I liked how you bolded the first line, made it stand out and made me think. "if this is bolded, what could be so important next?" I think a little more detail could've gone in, like about the situation or what the character was thinking about. - Rating: 4/5

02 ~ after - This chapter was confusing to me, good, but confusing. I think the chapter could've been longer, as well as more detailed. I think the storyline0 is really coming along though, very well done. - Rating: 3/5

03 ~ before - It was a very dramatic chapter, I just think that detail could've been added because when you add detail, it helps with suspense and things like that, if used in the right way.  - Rating: 3/5

04 ~ after - It was a very insightful chapter, getting to look into what the character thought. I think more detail could've been added to show who this character was. You can always keep it mysterious but have detail. I know that is hard, but you can do it. - Rating: 3/5

Overall: It was pretty good, the storyline was nice and left me thinking about what could happen in the past and future. I think detail is something that is needed in your story as well.

Cover & Graphics: I like the cover, though, the blue clashes just slightly, but it's still good. I like the dark essence of it, but in all the darkness, there was a girl with bright clothes, seems as though she is slowly fading into the darkness. I think the graphics in the book were pretty good, well chosen.

About The Book: I liked the short, but sweet summary. Maybe you can put a little more on what the book is about, not just that recurring line, "a tale of heartbreak" and stuff like that.

What You Can Work On: You can work on the detail and clarification of what is going on. I think there were a few small grammar errors, but that can be fixed. I also think the switching between past and present shouldn't be done just like that (imagine me snapping) but rather, make the chapters longer so that it doesn't change like that. (snapping again)

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I hope this helps. If you have any questions, you can ask. Thank you for requesting!

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