Introduction - I think this is a great start to your book. It really intrigued me, especially the first sentence. It caught me by surprise when I heard 'League of The Sights' I expected something different than creatures, but it was all about them. I am no grammar expert, but I only saw 1 mistake, which is good. I think, even though it was a letter, at least that's what it appears to be, I think that you can put a little more detail like what happened, why they are writing to this person, or why they are a sight. - Rating: 4/5

Prololouge - I really liked this chapter as well. I think you could have put a bit more detail in their dialogue, like what they were doing, or what their expression was. I loved how you prepared us for the chapters ahead, I saw that the other chapters would go into more detail as they were titled the sections of the story. I think you could've bolded the titles like this: Crete, Greece tragedy.... so it would be more clear where each section was. - Rating: 4/5

Crete, Greece - I quite enjoyed that chapter, as I am a big fan of Greek mythology. I think it was a good chapter, I think there were only a few small, minor mistakes in the story and that's fine, everyone makes mistakes. I think it had a very nice ending and a very nice beginning. At first, I didn't understand what was going on, but as I went on, it got better and I understood. I applaud you for this chapter. - Rating: 4.5/5

Victoria, Australia - I thought this was a good chapter, for me, it didn't make too much sense though, but that's okay. A little bit more explaining could've been done about the frog and eel, I got confused on that part. To me, the words you used to describe it were pretty good, but what was really going on wasn't super exciting. - Rating: 3/5

Kyushu, Japan - Really liked this chapter, and I laughed at some parts, the parts that were funny. Like the part where the old Kappa said it stole underwear XD. The detail was great, as was the storyline. (chapter line?) I think maybe you could've made it clear what a Kappa is? Or why they need water or something like that. - Rating: 4/5

Overall - I thought it was great, it was funny and very descriptive. I thought that this was a fun way to think of mythical creatures as well. 

Cover & Graphics - I thought that the cover was pretty good, though, I think since it is a story about mythical creatures, why not add some? Or make it seem.... mythical. The graphics in the chapters were really only that eye. The Athena Parthenon. It's nice to see that you are explaining what it looks like with a real visual too.

About The Book - It has a very nice summary, very intriguing. The tags fit the story very well too. I think the title is a very nice fit to what I've read about so far.

What you can work on - It's an easy fix, I think you can explain things a little more, like I said above. As well as reading over before you publish it, because I caught a few spelling mistakes. For example, I can't remember where, but it said feet instead of foot. 

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I hope this helps. If you have any questions, you can ask. Thank you for requesting!

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